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A Mask of 1,000 Tears
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A Mask of 1,000 Tears |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Whispering kiss, Sparkeling reality, A mask of tears, Glistening for eternity. It waits... A flash of lightning, Across the sky, Announces the thunder's rumble, Listen to it cry. It screams... Then the tears Begin to fall Leaving nothing behind Except the destruction of us all. It laughs... It hears the torment, It feels the pain, The voices won't let it free, It looks up at the rain. It cries... Its struck with realization, Things it couldn't see before, The storms continues to drag on, As it thinks more and more. It seeths... No one seems to wonder, No one seems to care its gone, Its life like paper, on which they have drawn. It burrows... Deep within the darkened ground, This thing of nature hides, To forever be forgotten, lost in earth's insides. It waits... Until once again it will be discovered. If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
Different. And very interesting. I like it. +Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+ |
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Zephrex New Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 4Alberta, Canada |
I really like this peom, very nice. |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Mmmm... haunting. I love it. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
This might me my favorite of yours, Excellent job, thank you for sharing. WinterWren |
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SCREAMIN Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 51US, Tx |
Now THAT is poetry. It's emotion captured by words and arranged so perfectly that it draws you in, and doesnt let go. The best thing about it is, that you dont want it to let go, you want it to keep going. Thank you for that, it is truly a work of art. But soft, what light through yonder window break. It is the east, and Juliet is the sun... |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Very interesting read. A very differently styled poem, put together in a unique way. Thanks for a great read. --Marie "You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life) |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Thanks everyone, I'm glad you all liked this. Your replies are appreciated. If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I really like this one. Especially the style. This is a really good poem. The imagery is great. Perfect word usage. Nice job! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
This could very well be my favorite of yours..the emotion the arrangement of words the feel the flow...sigh...perfect. Absolutly hauntingly sunning. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Actually, I thought that this wasn't your best piece. But since you're not open to critiques, I won't say anything more. Keep up the writing, though.  -Leah  |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Made me think of "just remember, beneath the snow lies the seed that with the sun's rays becomes the rose".....it's all there waiting to be discovered when time and condition is right. i like this poem alot, thanks for sharing Love, Liz xx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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