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Petey
Junior Member

since 2002-12-16

Posts 27
Idaho, USA

0 posted 2003-05-12 06:44 PM

One-Sided

There were days wasted,
Thinking on you.
You've my love not tasted,
Nor seen what what it can do.
You've never heard me when I cried,
Nor smelled the scent of my rose,
Nor felt the pain I've had inside.
I feel now like I'm a thorn in your side.
You've never known,
How far it's went,
How much it's grown,
Without your consent.

That's why I feel this way,
It's all in this cursed game we play.
But before I knew it,
The game was over.
They say, "Forget her,
You should now know her."
I can't win, but I can't give up,
Even though I've almost decided,
Maybe my love is one-sided.

When I run my hands through your hair,
Outside in the slight breeze,
Where we get planty of fresh air,
I feel my spine freeze.
Bliss to a high degree.
But then I wake,
Knowing things are never what they seem,
Knowing it's all a dream.
I always hope it comes true,
And I think you don't.
My chances are far and few,
Inside I know it won't.

That's why I feel this way,
It's all in this cursed game we play.
But before I knew it,
The game was over.
They say, "Forget her,
You should now know her."
I can't win, but I can't give up,
Even though I've almost decided,
Love cannot be one-sided...

-Petey

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

1 posted 2003-05-12 07:01 PM

I can really connect to whats going on in the poem.

+Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+
T. S. Eliot (1888 - 1965)

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-05-12 07:50 PM

Great job. I especially loved the third stanza.
Keep writin'
~Lexy

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

3 posted 2003-05-12 08:43 PM

Petey-

Sounds like a song to me.

If it's not, it should be, based on the way it's written (format and all). Really enjoyed this one. I don't think I have anything to say about this other than you did an excellent job on expressing the way you feel in a context many of us can understand.

And yes, much like any kind of relationship, love cannot be one-sided.

I encourage you to keep writing, and don't forget to check out the other poets here. I'm sure they'd love to hear from you as well!

-Leah

RUN FOR THE HILLS!!! *runs for the Somewhat Hills*

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