Teen Poetry #6 |
One-Sided |
Petey Junior Member
since 2002-12-16
Posts 27Idaho, USA |
One-Sided There were days wasted, Thinking on you. You've my love not tasted, Nor seen what what it can do. You've never heard me when I cried, Nor smelled the scent of my rose, Nor felt the pain I've had inside. I feel now like I'm a thorn in your side. You've never known, How far it's went, How much it's grown, Without your consent. That's why I feel this way, It's all in this cursed game we play. But before I knew it, The game was over. They say, "Forget her, You should now know her." I can't win, but I can't give up, Even though I've almost decided, Maybe my love is one-sided. When I run my hands through your hair, Outside in the slight breeze, Where we get planty of fresh air, I feel my spine freeze. Bliss to a high degree. But then I wake, Knowing things are never what they seem, Knowing it's all a dream. I always hope it comes true, And I think you don't. My chances are far and few, Inside I know it won't. That's why I feel this way, It's all in this cursed game we play. But before I knew it, The game was over. They say, "Forget her, You should now know her." I can't win, but I can't give up, Even though I've almost decided, Love cannot be one-sided... -Petey |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
I can really connect to whats going on in the poem. +Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+ |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Great job. I especially loved the third stanza. Keep writin' ~Lexy |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Sounds like a song to me. If it's not, it should be, based on the way it's written (format and all). Really enjoyed this one. I don't think I have anything to say about this other than you did an excellent job on expressing the way you feel in a context many of us can understand. And yes, much like any kind of relationship, love cannot be one-sided. I encourage you to keep writing, and don't forget to check out the other poets here. I'm sure they'd love to hear from you as well! -Leah RUN FOR THE HILLS!!! *runs for the Somewhat Hills* |
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