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affectionately mine
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since 2003-05-08
Posts 6
Washington, US

0 posted 2003-05-08 06:14 PM


I don't remember exactly when I wrote this... But it means a lot to me.

I cry
I cry for everytime I hurt you
I cry for everything I've done
I cry, my love, 'cus I just told you
That for you I'm not the one

I cry because I've cause you pain
I cry because I care.
I cry for you and I hate to complain,
But this is just unfair.

The Anguish I feel is so surreal-
And I wish it wasn't so.
But I can't help the way I feel,
I wish I could just go.

I feel for you, like I could die,
If i ever hurt your heart.
And that, my friend is why I cry,
And it's tearing me apart.

I cry for you and hope you'll forgive me
For everything I've done.
I cry in hope that you'll be happy
And that you'll find the one

I never meant to hurt you
Or break you deep inside.
I cry becuase there's nothing I can do,
But the pain's too much to hide.

I never cry for shallow things
Or 'problems' that do not matter
But for you, the pain this brings
I feel will make my heart shatter.

You've always been so good to me,
I could never understand why.
But last night what you said to me,
is the reason why I cry.

"Those who say it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all have obviously never loved." -Affectionately mine

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blackandwhitehorizon
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since 2003-05-05
Posts 183
an akward state of mind
1 posted 2003-05-08 09:16 PM


this is a touching poem... i like it a lot... good use of  rhyme... and it flows...
Tabitha LeAnn
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since 2003-03-27
Posts 50
Kansas, USA
2 posted 2003-05-08 09:26 PM


AMAZING POEM! I COULD REALLY RELATE I THINK THIS POEM SPEAKS TO EVERYONE IN A DIFFERENT WAY. I KNOW TO ME IT DOES AND I COMPLETELY FEEL WHAT YOU ARE SAYING WITH IT. I LOVED THIS!!!
Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03
Posts 105
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2003-05-08 10:04 PM


I really liked this poem a whole lot...it got me thinking..and kind of set me off for my latest poem..thanks a bunch!! Good write!!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
4 posted 2003-05-08 10:34 PM


First of all, welcome to passions. Second of all, excellent first write. I can definetly relate. I hope to see more from you.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

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since 2003-01-03
Posts 696
washington, USA
5 posted 2003-05-09 12:59 PM


Hey girl! I didn't know you were a poet! Well welcome to passions! Thought you would check it out for yourself did ya? Pretty cool place if I don't say so myself...! This was beautifully written, very heart felt, I can just feel the emotion coming at me through every line. Enjoyable read.
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
6 posted 2003-05-10 12:12 PM


This is a VERY good poem. It had a really good rhyme scheme and it flowed PERFECTLY!!! Awesome job...absolutely wonderful!!! I love it!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
7 posted 2003-05-10 02:12 AM


First things first,
Welcome to piptalk!!!
Excellent first post!! Wow, Im blown away by this one
You put the emotions into it perfectly!
I hope you have a long and happy stay here.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

affectionately mine
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since 2003-05-08
Posts 6
Washington, US
8 posted 2003-05-12 11:17 PM


hey everyone. Thank u so much for all of your posts.. sorry i was unable to reply sooner.. computer access has been limited lately.
heh yeah heather, i actually have a binder much like yours FILLED with my own poetry.. just kinda emotional and hidden is all well, thank u all so much for the warm welcome, and i hope to hear more from u
thanx so much
Always,

"Those who say it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all have obviously never loved." -Affectionately mine

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