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I cry
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I cry |
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affectionately mine New Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 6Washington, US |
I don't remember exactly when I wrote this... But it means a lot to me. I cry I cry for everytime I hurt you I cry for everything I've done I cry, my love, 'cus I just told you That for you I'm not the one I cry because I've cause you pain I cry because I care. I cry for you and I hate to complain, But this is just unfair. The Anguish I feel is so surreal- And I wish it wasn't so. But I can't help the way I feel, I wish I could just go. I feel for you, like I could die, If i ever hurt your heart. And that, my friend is why I cry, And it's tearing me apart. I cry for you and hope you'll forgive me For everything I've done. I cry in hope that you'll be happy And that you'll find the one I never meant to hurt you Or break you deep inside. I cry becuase there's nothing I can do, But the pain's too much to hide. I never cry for shallow things Or 'problems' that do not matter But for you, the pain this brings I feel will make my heart shatter. You've always been so good to me, I could never understand why. But last night what you said to me, is the reason why I cry. "Those who say it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all have obviously never loved." -Affectionately mine |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
this is a touching poem... i like it a lot... good use of rhyme... and it flows... |
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Tabitha LeAnn Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50Kansas, USA |
AMAZING POEM! I COULD REALLY RELATE I THINK THIS POEM SPEAKS TO EVERYONE IN A DIFFERENT WAY. I KNOW TO ME IT DOES AND I COMPLETELY FEEL WHAT YOU ARE SAYING WITH IT. I LOVED THIS!!!  |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
I really liked this poem a whole lot...it got me thinking..and kind of set me off for my latest poem..thanks a bunch!! Good write!! Jenn **It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not** |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
First of all, welcome to passions. Second of all, excellent first write. I can definetly relate. I hope to see more from you. Jenni To hate you must first have loved. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey girl! I didn't know you were a poet! Well welcome to passions! Thought you would check it out for yourself did ya? Pretty cool place if I don't say so myself...! This was beautifully written, very heart felt, I can just feel the emotion coming at me through every line. Enjoyable read. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
This is a VERY good poem. It had a really good rhyme scheme and it flowed PERFECTLY!!! Awesome job...absolutely wonderful!!! I love it! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
First things first, Welcome to piptalk!!!  Excellent first post!! Wow, Im blown away by this one  You put the emotions into it perfectly! I hope you have a long and happy stay here. WinterWren |
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affectionately mine New Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 6Washington, US |
hey everyone. Thank u so much for all of your posts.. sorry i was unable to reply sooner.. computer access has been limited lately. heh yeah heather, i actually have a binder much like yours FILLED with my own poetry.. just kinda emotional and hidden is all  well, thank u all so much for the warm welcome, and i hope to hear more from u thanx so much Always, "Those who say it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all have obviously never loved." -Affectionately mine |
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