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I'd be Damned
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I'd be Damned |
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ShimmeringDarkness New Member
since 2002-07-11
Posts 4kyuuki |
Why are the sweetest dreams so memorable Why do they feel so real Why does the touch feel so warm Why, your lips so soft your gentle touch your gentle words and gentle winds to calm Why is the waking up so miserble Why do i feel so cursed Why is the morning air so cold Why am I in this world your gentle touch your gentle words and calming winds are gone If that was a dream world I was in Then let me dream again But if you were in that dream with me Then I'd be damned for leaving the gentle touch those gentle words now haunt me with the chilling wind Writing this was kinda emotionally draining... o.O aye...neways second post!Just really felt like sharing this... have fun ^^ |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
This is really good I like it a lot. Jenni To hate you must first have loved. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
This was very good and emotional as well. My favorite part was the third stanza. Hope to hear more from ya! ~Jess  "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
Hmmm... *thinking* I really like the way this poem was done. +Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+ |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
I like the contrast... it makes it very interesting. You kept the rhythm and flow going really well... nice job. |
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