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peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

0 posted 2003-05-09 07:40 PM

Don't look in the mirror,
For you life is flashing before you,
Scared to let go,
Afraid of what's next,
The reflection you finally see,
Is horrific to the heart,
I see you bleeding inside,
Reaching for a hand,
Only to seek none,
Just loneliness...
All that appears,
You see the crying eyes,
Screaming out your name,
But you can't hear them,
Too far away...
You're so close to the edge.

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

1 posted 2003-05-09 09:22 PM

Good one, I definetly felt the emotions throughout the whole thing. Thanks for the read.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

2 posted 2003-05-09 11:12 PM

Wow!!! Nice job, Jess!!! I REALLY love this one. I felt it the whole way through...definetly! This was awesome!!! Perfect word usage. Nice job! Love's!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-05-10 02:22 AM

VERY strong poem!!
I really really love this one!!
Especially the line, "I see you bleeding inside, reaching for a hand."
Did I alread mention that I really love this?
Another for my library.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2003-05-10 02:02 PM

WOW!!! That was so powerful and very good. My name is Sass, but I have not got my password yet so I am writting under Lexy's name. We both think it was very real and straight forward with your emotions. Great write!!!
Loved it
Sass & Lexy

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

5 posted 2003-05-18 01:17 PM

very nice

"Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives"

xxshadowxx
Junior Member

since 2003-05-17

Posts 43
Texas

6 posted 2003-05-18 01:31 PM

Wow... great poem i felt the emotions

Carrie

"Hard days made me, hard nights shaped me"

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