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rippled hope |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I wonder if you could love me... If I kissed you in the rain, would you taste the salt on my lips, would you taste the utter despair being dispursed from wanting you... Needing you. Let my gray tears rush all over you, let your eyes tell me what you feel. They give so much evidence of deep feeling, I'm simple, I'm not an ocean, I'm a single ripple. so, just love me, I'm sure its easy. Let it flow naturally. It may be pointless, my feeling... But I can't forget it. It lingers in the air, blue breath engulfing me, the shapes your lips make as you speak. Everything! It hurts, but I love it, this feeling you give me. Its the stinging sensation as the waves devour me, hard but exelerating. I can't help but want you to love me.. Beneathe the layers of this gray water.. because you see past it all. To this place inside me.. [This message has been edited by Lexy (05-08-2003 11:25 PM).] |
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Tabitha LeAnn Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50Kansas, USA |
I LOVE THIS AND IM SHOCKED I COULD UNDERSTAND IT WITH ITS BIG WORDS (LOL). BUT I DID AND IT SO TOUCHED ME. I THINK POEMS SPEAK TO EVERYONE IN A DIFFERENT WAY AND THIS POEM REALLY SPOKE TO ME. I FEEL I COULD DEFEINITLY RELATE TO WHAT U WERE TRYING TO TELL THIS PERSON WHO OBVIOUSLY MEANS ALOT TO YOU!!! ITS GOOD THAT YOU CAN FEEL THIS WAY ABOUT SOMEONE AND HAVE ENOUGH COURAGE TO ASK THEM AND TELL THEM THEESE THINGS WITHOUT WORRING ABOUT LOOSING THEM IT SHOWS TRUST.  NEVER STOP WRITTING!!! |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Very strong poem! I've never come across a poem of yours I didn't like, and this one is no exception. As always, excellent job, I love it! WinterWren |
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