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Lindsay
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since 2003-03-26

Posts 59
South Dakota

0 posted 2003-05-05 10:14 PM

Cried my last tear tonight
For the last time I held you tight
For tomorrow I am leaving
I won't even be breathing
Have to get away from this pain
Tired of living life in the fast lane
Can't go on like this
All I want it bliss
So this is my final good-bye
Tired of living this lie
So I'll kiss you for the last time
Write my last rhyme
And then I'll make all this go away
I have to leave, cannot stay

© Copyright 2003 Lindsay Strube - All Rights Reserved

FlyingCloud
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since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

1 posted 2003-05-05 10:26 PM

This poem is one of the greatest I've read yet...

+Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+
T. S. Eliot (1888 - 1965)

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-05-05 10:46 PM

that was good, I especially loved the begining.
~Lexy

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-05-05 10:48 PM

that is really good!!
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

4 posted 2003-05-06 01:47 PM

*sigh* Know the feelin'.

Totally good job. I love this one.

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2003-05-06 08:02 PM

Good job...Great poem..keep writing!!
Jenn

**It's better to be hated for who you are, than loved for who you are not**

blackandwhitehorizon
Member

since 2003-05-05

Posts 183
an akward state of mind

6 posted 2003-05-06 08:06 PM

somehow the rhyme doesn't really flow... but somehow i also think it's wonderful... great poem... i love it... keep up the good work!

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

7 posted 2003-05-07 10:34 AM

Good. Just good. ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

8 posted 2003-05-07 07:03 PM

Very strong poem, I like this one alot.
Well done.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

9 posted 2003-05-10 12:00 PM

Very beautiful!!! Definetly loved this one. Keep writing!!!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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