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Hopeless Time |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
On sunday I got into a really big fight with my family. It was really depressing but I didn't write a poem about it. Then tonight the guy that I used to be with and that I still, unfortunatly for me, love tells me that he wants to be with someone else and is that ok with me cause she happens to be a good friend of mine and she doesn't want to hurt me so could I please tell her that everything is ok? The memory is a little jaded but you understand why! So yeah, I decided to post this. It seemed to reflect my current emotional status. Is there hope in the most hopeless time? Pain and rage there all the same what's a few more to hide away? the sticky sweet laughter of a now lost friend she fade like the others when it comes to the end tired of a love that is not returned tired of the faith that is not confirmed sick of the promises never kept sick of the tears that have been wept what's in the silence that seems so loud? Loyalty broken, distrust allowed honey coated lies, masked in a face this is what we have become, this disgusting little race In the silence we are all alone through the dark we hold our own Nothing but fear, the sweet poison we fight Drink it down fast, let your soul take flight For who has the courage to live another day? who is so innocent as to want to stay? Through the despair and hate of this ryhme I ask you Is there hope in the most hopeless time? Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
Whoa. This was really good. In some ways I can relate to what you're saying, but with a different situation. Good write, and this is going in my library! ~Jess  "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I hope everything works out for you and let me tell you you wrote it very well. "life is crazy sometimes, and you can't do anything about that. Just hang on tight and enjoy it. If you have to scream sometimes, just don't cry" |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
That is soo good. I was in a similar situation...hope it gets better for you. good write. Jenni To hate you must first have loved. |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
Oooooh... really, really good. Hope things get better for ya soon.  |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Im blown away, this just might be my favorite of yours. I tried to pick a favorite line but I couldn't so I've narrowed it down to, "What's in the silence that seems so loud?" and, "tired of the faith that is not confirmed." Excellent excellent poem. Im so sad to read the story behind this poem. I know it will take some time but I sincerely hope that everything gets better for you.   WinterWren |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
I can't even begin to tell you how beautiful this poem is. This is definetly one of the best I've read in a long time. I really enjoyed this one. I am speechless. I'm at a loss for words, literally. I love this! It's absolutely beautiful, just beautiful. This one would have definetly made it into the book!! Oh well...nice write anyway! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Thanks for all the replies you guys. Not really in any better state at this point but it's only been I day..I figure give it some time to let the wound heal..But I'm glad that you can see the message of the words through all the pain. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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affectionately mine New Member
since 2003-05-08
Posts 6Washington, US |
Hey darling, your writing is beautiful, and i hope things start looking up. it is completely unfair to you what those 2 are doing, but as i have said before 'it's high school.. it's drama'. (Smile!) i love ya girl!  "Those who say it is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all have obviously never loved." -Affectionately mine |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
I know relationships like that can be frustrating, but no matter what, you gotta see the sun after the storm. I know what you're going through. +Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood.+ |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey Manda! Thanks for reading! yeah I think it's pretty unfair overall to but your right it is high school drama and that is what makes it so infuriating..can't we have a sane moment for one second? One moment were we are all not trying to outdue each other and hurt each other? As you can tell I'm still pretty much in the same state of mind I was in when I wrote this! But thank you all for your responses, I'm not happy that you can relate but glad you like the writing none the less. ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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