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*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

0 posted 2003-05-04 01:27 AM

crimson Hues accuate
A darkening blood red sky
Chosen colors torn together
The tales of you and I

Purple highlights flash across
In a game of chance
Throbing, pulsing, Rythmic pounding
To this we set our dance

Come away with me
To that distant land
were fear, choas, and turmoil
mean nothing to a man

Mask yourself in happiness
and toit tightly cling
For sorrow is the fear of doubt
to which the devil sings

Fallen angel weeps in agony
for the bliss that she once knew
with battern broken wings
she seeks our haven too

The melody of thunder
the beat as lightning strikes
you laugh in mocking beauty
dancing to the peril of the night

Ignorance is a sweet poison
as addicting as the night
Drunken from the golden flask
chase away fear with the light

The waves crash against the rocks
peer up at a sky dripping blood
hear the delusional scream of a lover
the sand at your feet turns to mud

Then as if by purposeful accident,
the colors are blown free
set to tunes of a different light
and the crimson sky must flee

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

1 posted 2003-05-04 01:27 PM

Wow, I could read this a million times and still not be tired of it! This one is going in my library!

Oh yeah, you surely have my vote! ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

2 posted 2003-05-04 11:38 PM

Thank you for the reply! I liked this one a lot as well! I'm not really sure why..the images they are kind of cptivating in a way..to me at least! Anyway glad to hear that you liked it, and thanks again for the comment.
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

rapturedmist
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 30
USA

3 posted 2003-06-24 02:50 AM

so this is the one you were talking to me about...it has good imagery [wow i'm lacking spelling right now] and the feel for it overall is captavating as you said. And I can definitly [again lack of spelling right]see how you're a better writer then me.
-RM

Song_for_Serenity
Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 97
USA

4 posted 2003-06-24 03:28 PM

Hey there! I'm surprised I haven't read this before. It's a great poem. The imagery is amazing, and the rise and fall of it is great and keeps the reader interested. Have a spiffy day!
~Angela

"I wish I could carry your smile in my heart, for times when my life seems so low"

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

5 posted 2003-06-24 05:37 PM

WOW. I liked this alot. Romantic, Descriptive, Very cool. Great job.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

6 posted 2003-06-24 05:41 PM

Again...amazing!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

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