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vashthestampede
New Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 9

0 posted 2003-05-03 10:42 PM

My beautiful girl,
my broken-hearted--
my lovely one and true.

You are my life--my destiny,
my heart, into the blue.

Angel in the evening,
darling in the morn,
Daffodil at night--
petals die--I'm torn...

Whatever you are,
you beautiful girl,
all I know, is--
I love you.

With all my might...
your eyes are pearl
so rare to me--
you are the light.

lingering thoughts
Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 70
Illinois, USA

1 posted 2003-05-03 11:00 PM

I liked yor poem, the symbolism was good

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WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2003-05-03 11:15 PM

First off, WELCOME to Pip!!!!
This is a very good first post,
one of the best love poems I have ever read.

I hope you have a long and enjoyable stay!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

vashthestampede
New Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 9

3 posted 2003-05-10 08:03 PM

Thank you, lingering thoughts and winterwren

for the nice welcome!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

4 posted 2003-07-14 09:32 PM

Oh...I'm liking this one...

"Angel in the evening,
darling in the morn,
Daffodil at night--
petals die--I'm torn..."

Beautifully written, vash...
A belated WELCOME to you! I hope you'll stick
around and share some more of your work.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

5 posted 2003-07-15 01:05 AM

Oh!! I'm not sure whether to gush out everything I'm feeling at this piece or just leave it at I loved it and amazing first post!! I think that one will do seeing that the other could go on for a page! Loving the word choice and constant emotions throughout the poem, well done
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Rise of Truth
Member

since 2003-07-12

Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun

6 posted 2003-07-15 06:03 AM

Trigun.

I hope you aren't writing about something that once was.

I am the prophet
Harbinger of what you fear the most
Your enemy of belligerent honesty
Destroyer of your livelihood, built on falsehood

collarbone_girl
Junior Member

since 2003-07-14

Posts 45
Wonderland

7 posted 2003-07-15 08:45 AM

i didn't like this.
the theme was gorgeous... but something about it just didn't floooow right.

This Cool Night Air Is Curious...

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

8 posted 2003-07-15 10:18 AM

That was so sweet and emotional, I absolutely loved it, can't wait to read more from you, welcome to pip

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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