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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2003-05-03 07:44 PM

He watches her walk away,
Watches her walk outside.
She looks back as if to say,
"I wish you hadn't lied."

His tears hit the floor,
Time after time again.
Thinking of the vowels he swore,
To never cause her pain.

But now they're broken,
And he relives the past.
All the hateful words spoken,
Had been their very last.

After that last fight,
they hadn't seen each other.
She lays in bed and cries at night,
Wishing it had been another.

She lost her best friend,
and she had lost her husband too.
But she has a broken heart to mend,
and alot of fixing to do.

So with a mask that hid the pain,
She walked away from what was wrong.
And as she walked she broke the chain,
that had held her there so long...

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

[This message has been edited by Spine Grinder (05-03-2003 08:09 PM).]

A.L
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

1 posted 2003-05-03 08:54 PM

Such a great poem, you write like me, and you think like me

maybe thats why I can relate so well to this one thank you

-Ali-

A.L
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

2 posted 2003-05-03 08:55 PM

You might wanna check out one of my poems also

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-05-03 10:16 PM

this is sooo good. Sooo has my vote. good one.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

4 posted 2003-05-04 10:41 AM

Thanks you two, I'm glad you liked it. I think this is one of my better poems.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

5 posted 2003-05-04 02:10 PM

Hunnie, you did such a good job on this poem! I totally relate. I also think this is one of your better poems, but then again, you have a lot to compare it to.

Great write hun!

Love ya!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

mindy
Junior Member

since 2002-12-18

Posts 34
VA, US

6 posted 2003-05-04 06:08 PM

this is very good...It shows the emotion of both the male and the female in the relatioship...very good...

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

7 posted 2003-05-05 06:39 AM

Thank you two also. I'm glad you both liked it as well.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

8 posted 2003-05-05 08:41 PM

You did a really good job with this poem, Staci. I really liked the rhyme scheme. I like it. Nice job...got my vote!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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