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SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

0 posted 2003-04-29 08:07 PM

Lying on an emtpy bed,
In an even emptier room.

Delusional thoughts swimming around in my head,
Insanity, I've become completely consumed.

It is such an irresistible temptation,
And a simple plan derived.

Through having such infatuation,
With the warmth from which I'm deprived.

I would love to easily finish this now,
For someone to find me so desperately slain.

To descend to the firery underground,
And put an end to my world of pain.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

1 posted 2003-04-29 09:27 PM

Your poem was one of desperation (thats what I saw), i understand that feeling. wanting just for the end to come...but knwoing you can't. beautiful poem
you have my vote.

Regina

"Despite all my rage I am still just a rat in a cage, Then someone will say what is lost can never be saved"
-Smashing Pumpkins

*Dark Princess*
Junior Member

since 2003-04-13

Posts 22
lost in the shadows

2 posted 2003-04-30 01:46 AM

You have my vote..I can really relate to theese feelings, and you did a very good job of expressing them. Jessie

[This message has been edited by *Dark Princess* (04-30-2003 01:47 AM).]

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

3 posted 2003-04-30 06:46 AM

o yesh yesh...thats a keeper...lol u got my vote

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

sykopathicfreek
Junior Member

since 2003-04-22

Posts 24
ohio, usa

4 posted 2003-04-30 09:20 AM

S--W--E--E--T
I love this one, you got my vote!

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

5 posted 2003-04-30 06:51 PM

You have got to keep thinking that there's a light somewhere in that darkness! That's my only suggestion. Other than that, you have my vote!

^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^
Unknown

heart_of_ice
Junior Member

since 2003-02-18

Posts 14
England

6 posted 2003-05-03 10:51 AM

great poem....i can really relate, but remember, things get better...just realised I forgot to vote...sorry

[This message has been edited by heart_of_ice (05-04-2003 08:01 AM).]

peachesNcream
Senior Member

since 2001-08-21

Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears

7 posted 2003-05-03 02:42 PM

I really felt this one. This was good. No, it was great. hehe

You have my vote homie! ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

8 posted 2003-05-03 05:35 PM

I like it a lot... has a strong beginning.

got my vote

-othersideofthemirror

A.L
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

9 posted 2003-05-03 05:42 PM

oh how I can relate to this poem, it hurts...and your not the only one that feels this way, I assure you, I hope things will get better for you...

-Ali-

A.L
Member

since 2003-03-15

Posts 131

10 posted 2003-05-03 07:08 PM

you have my vote

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

11 posted 2003-05-03 09:54 PM

I really really love this poem,
Im going through a hard time right now, and I really appreciate this.
Well done, my vote for this one.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

12 posted 2003-05-03 10:11 PM

This has my vote.
Jenni

To hate you must first have loved.

TopGunLauren
Senior Member

since 2000-08-02

Posts 718
California

13 posted 2003-05-03 10:16 PM

Well I haven't beem on here in awhile but this is a really good poem.Keep up the awsome work.
Lauren

"I just needed someone to talk to you were just to busy with yourself."-Staind

"You've got to get yourself together you got stuck in a moment and y

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

14 posted 2003-05-05 08:46 PM

Thank you all so much for replying! I appreciate your replies and even more so, your votes. I love hearing what I do right or wrong in my poetry...so keep letting me now! Thank you so much! Much love, Megan.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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