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sing'n fool
Member

since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

0 posted 2003-04-28 02:41 AM

Only 16

Torn and conflicted,
a girl stands alone at her sink.
The answer just moments away.

She walks her own prelaid footsteps,
awaiting what is to be a turning point in her life.
Tears fill her eyes
as the answer lay before her...
pregnant at 16.

It seemed just days before
she was a normal girl,
laughing and having fun with her friend.
Enjoying her youth
and company of her boyfriend.

She's active in school events
and an honor role student.
No one could see her other side;
the side that she hid all to well.

The girl that would sneek out at night
and party with her friends.
The girl that felt no one could relate to or understand her.
The girl that was tricked into thinking that
love was derived from sex.

Something too often confused by the young.
The girl who is now alone...
pregnant at 16.

M.P.D

Be yourself. Say what you feel. Nothing is wrong. To your own self be real!!

[This message has been edited by sing'n fool (04-28-2003 03:08 AM).]

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

1 posted 2003-04-28 03:05 AM

woah very deep! but at the end shouldn't it be is instead of in? just a thought. this one made me think of my close friend cus the same thing happened to her and she was alone until she found me and now shes like my little sister. great poem mike loved it!
robin

i am who i am and that's all that i am and all i shall ever be and if you don't like who i am then leave!

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

2 posted 2003-04-28 03:49 AM

I know that you didn't have a particular person of subject for this piece, which makes it quite interesting that you chose it as subject...I suppose for not being a pregnant 16 year old girl...or even a girl at all...or 16...you captured the essense quite well...good stuff.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

3 posted 2003-04-28 10:11 AM

My sister is only 16, and every day I pray that she is smarter than that....it is a really real problem today. Nice work.

Jenn

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

heart_of_ice
Junior Member

since 2003-02-18

Posts 14
England

4 posted 2003-05-03 10:36 AM

i've been there......you really captured the feelings well....great poem

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

5 posted 2003-05-03 11:07 PM

Very strong poem,
it's so sad that this kind of thing really happens.
Well done!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

lingering thoughts
Member

since 2003-05-03

Posts 70
Illinois, USA

6 posted 2003-05-03 11:12 PM

Wow, good write, i can not relate to this but there are SO many girls at my school who are pregnant at such a young age...

*Cassandra

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

7 posted 2003-05-05 02:30 PM

I can relate to this amazingly well, except thankfully I'm not pregnant at 16. I've had so many friends who have gotten pregnant at 16 and some who freaked out because they thought they might be. And it's even a bit odd that you should choose to write about it considering you're a guy. But you did a good job of it.

wings of the moon
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 323
Pink bubblegum land

8 posted 2003-05-05 05:57 PM

yes an odd subject considering your sex but I like this side that you captured well:

"No one could see her other side;
the side that she hid all to well.

The girl that would sneek out at night
and party with her friends.
The girl that felt no one could relate to or understand her.
The girl that was tricked into thinking that
love was derived from sex."

well done...

"more than yesterday, less than tomorrow, i love you"

jaysh
Member

since 2003-04-16

Posts 133
IL, USA

9 posted 2003-05-05 06:16 PM

yes good poem! keep writing, I enjoyed reading this

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

10 posted 2003-05-05 07:10 PM

is this the same sing'n fool from Lightning Rod's Freedom Hall?

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