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devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2003-05-01 06:12 PM

These are just a couple poems about nature things..U can just read one and comment on it if you wish..Doesn`t matter as long as I get some feedback. LOL

The Leaf

The sun was shining the day I was born
Freash rain soaked me through and through
Surrounded by big oak branches
I grew to be the brightest green
Little children climbed my tree
But then one day
The sun and children went away
And I could feel myself getting old
Shriveled,brown,and lonely
I clung onto the last breath of life
Lonely, last one of the bunch
A light breeze swept across my body
Lifted me and I floated to the ground
One last breeze and I go danging
D
O
  W
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The street




                    WIND
             Sweeping, Riding
            Whistling, Groaning
             Calming,Disappear
                    WIND

Thanks..Allison

[This message has been edited by devinechild22 (05-01-2003 06:16 PM).]

Android 18
Member

since 2002-02-20

Posts 61
Austrailia (My DreamLand)

1 posted 2003-05-02 03:38 PM

Nice... I liked the first one. I've never been a fan of very short poems.

Good job!

*Serena*

"The best trick in basketball is putting the ball in the hoop, but if you bring the hoop down with you, I'll give you a cookie."

FlyingCloud
Member

since 2003-04-28

Posts 151
A little place inside my head

2 posted 2003-05-02 06:32 PM

There was a romantic story I read once about two leaves who realized they loved each other when it was too late.

I loved this!

^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^
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devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

3 posted 2003-05-02 07:31 PM

Thanks! I don`t usually like short poems either but i just tried something new. It`s good to experiment..Thatnks for the comments!

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

4 posted 2003-05-07 06:54 PM

hey
these were both good!
so u were a bucking bronco 'ey?? LoL
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

devinechild22
Senior Member

since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

5 posted 2003-05-08 05:06 PM

LoL...Don`t ask.

[This message has been edited by devinechild22 (05-08-2003 05:07 PM).]

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