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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I can see someone staring at me Her eyes in their intensity Confuse me Young eyes foolish eyes But determined eyes eyes that are defiant that state their strength so boldy and yet... was that a flicker of uncertainty? does this bold creature fear like others do? does she fear being alone of failing yes those bright eyes are afraid are unsure those eyes are quiet and contemplative and calculating those eyes are cold sometimes and uncaring those eyes are the eyes of a girl afraid to go out into the world alone but anticipating the challenge of life eyes that seek a childhood friend eyes that shed tears in the dark of night they belong to a girl I know... Me |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
Wonderful write. A person's eyes are the windows to there souls. Your discription of the way the eyes look is wonderful. Even the most bravest of creatures can be terrified of something, be it the smallest thing. You really showed how you feel in this one. Seems like a poem I would write for a loved one since I'm no good at saying anything, I gotta write it. Being alone in life sucks...I know cause I fear the same thing, and most of the time, I have to face that fear. Keep your chin up honey!! Read my work and read my thoughts |
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Peacebri Junior Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 44 |
I love this poem and yes its true, a persons eyes are the gates to their inner soul. This is such a powerful thoughtful poem and i love the ending. "these eyes belong to a girl I know.....Me" that is my favorite line!! keep up the great work and i cant wait to read more of your writings! |
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blueyedlioness Member
since 2003-04-24
Posts 289USA |
I really, really like this. It's capturing and entertaining. Very nice. |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
Wowee. This is incredible. I think that everyone can relate to this poem in some way. ^~Whoever does not love his work cannot hope that it will please others.~^ |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
really, really liked this piece...the illusion of looking into the eyes of another was nice... often, when we evaluate ourselves, we feel as though we're examining another...great work. Jeremy Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love. |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
My eyes have been so empty, vacant in my life Looking on, not understanding What I've lost is far more valuable That this encroaching pride Holding me back from realizing The truth of my eyes |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
I love this. Perfect twist at the end...reminds me of a poem I wrote, similar themes, similar twist, actually it was my first poem, so therefore it was way less expressive than this one, but hey! Thanks for sharing this  Luv, Liz xxx "Gorge the honey from life, and live through the stomach aches knowing they will pass..." ~Liz Pinard 2003~ |
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*Dark Princess* Junior Member
since 2003-04-13
Posts 22lost in the shadows |
I can really relate...This was so good..I'm sorry if ur going through a rough time...Feel free to e-mail me if you need to talk to someone...Jess |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Indeed, if you look closely, you can find any answer to any question in the eyes of a loved one. This was an interesting read. The approach to the emotions the other felt was different. Enjoyed, as always, Alicia. You are improving to become a very talented writer. The growth in you has been inspiring. Thanks for the read. --Marie "You can be idealistic for all of ten seconds before you die." (Imitation of Life) |
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