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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Well this one makes a bit more sense than the last two, but still not all that much..I think it's a faze I'm going through... Raging wind stings at my cheeks water pours A sponge that leaks Angry mountains stab the sky The wind enables me to fly Massive storms burn in my eyes Scarlet drip A rose that dies I am like a single rose A tiny beck that always flows My heart is pounding in my chest blood flows I never rest Untill I know the answer why? I will shrivel but not die Little voices in my head Breath of air what was said Pain and Anger mustn't stay though I'll remember every day A single rose will grow again A bit of light Erase my sin I was lost but know in found I know the answers true I am the way I am today all because of you.. Always strive for excellence never perfection. ~Bella~ [This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (04-25-2003 12:04 AM).] |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
I liked it. It was very train of thought and symbolic and that's what I usually try for. It starts of kinna sad but in the end is almost a triumph over the pains you have experianced. Only one thing though, was this line "I was lost but know in found" supposed to say I was lost but now am found cuz personally this line I didn't get as it is written. Good write nonetheless. Hope to see more. ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey, thanks for the reply! And yes the "in found" is suppose to be "am found"! But my silly computer won't let me edit it anymore. Anyways thanks for the comments there always aprreaciated! ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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