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Teen Poetry #6

This song.

LuckyFelix
Junior Member

since 2003-01-17

Posts 34
Here.

0 posted 2003-04-20 07:54 PM

This song...It takes me home.
To the road with that little house.
Where I should be..Where I'm not.
I walk it when I hear this song,
no matter how far away it is.
Every step a tear...
Past all the pines,
and the lake.
Over the metal grate bridge.
Along the open fields,
where the wind drys those tears.
And the song ends...

[This message has been edited by LuckyFelix (04-20-2003 08:10 PM).]

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2003-04-20 08:10 PM

I liked this. Very descriptive. I liked the line "Every step a tear" good job alex.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2003-04-20 09:46 PM

Great poem,
I know a couple songs that do that kinda thing to me.
Good imagery here.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

Jeremy Halstead
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

3 posted 2003-04-21 12:21 PM

"...ain't it funny how a melody
can bring back memories;
take you to another place in time
or even change your state of mind."

familiar feeling...good poem.

Jeremy

Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love.

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