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pearl6884 Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 72California coast 
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Anger Lingers in the air Scent of him No sight of her Roses on the table Reminder of forgotten Apologies Sadness hunts her Through hallways And silence Screams miserably In her ear Thoughts of him With her Fading Subconsciously Integrating He ruined her *To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...* -Blake [This message has been edited by pearl6884 (03-29-2003 12:14 AM).] |
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Tabitha LeAnn Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50Kansas, USA |
O WOW!!! I LOVED THIS POEM!!! IT WAS SO DEEP AND I FELT A REAL CONNECTION WITH WHAT YOUR WORDS WERE SAYING. KEEP ON WRITTIN AND ILL LOOK FORWARD TO READING. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
I agree that this is a very good poem. It made me sad, though, because so much hurt was felt in it. To be able to write in a way that emotions from the poem are felt by the writer, is very good writing. Hugs, Ethel |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Sarah, this is so very heartaching but beautiful, sweet friend, it saddens me to see this happen to so many and I send angel hugs out to all who have to endure this pain, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sarah, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sarah~ This is quite a powerful write. You've packed a lot of emotion into a few well-chosen words. Well done.  ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
really good poetry also sad Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
While I do tend to be a sensitive person, I'm often less easily moved by someone emotions on paper. This, however, did move me. I was envisioning every movement, seeing silence's ugly twin taunt your mind, and feeling every tear and wasted, presious moment. maybe it's just because I know the feeling so well...your portrayal does the pain justice... I voted for this. Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
wow. beautifully written, but so sad. I really got the feeling in this, because it is well written, maybe because I know the feeling all to well. I especially like the last line. It's simple, yet it says so much, and is the perfect ending to the poem. Jenni You are what you make yourself to be. [This message has been edited by BrokenDreams (04-16-2003 12:11 PM).] |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
It's always the short poems with powerful words that catch my attention. this is definetly one of them. great job **You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
This is a really amazing poem. There is soooo much feeling in it and it's so powerful. I think this is a completely AWESOME write and you have my vote. Wow, great work. XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
"And silence screams miserably." I especially like that line. But the whole poem is very good! You have my vote! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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A.L Member
since 2003-03-15
Posts 131 |
This is such a great poem and you have a way with words that give me the chills I can relate to this so much and I know how you feel...keep up the great writing!"Why do we fall in love when love will only tear us apart..." -Ali- |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Oh...how sad!!!! Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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