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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
I feel so empty without you I have no one to hold on to Why did you do this to me, why have you taken hope? Tomorrow holds no promise, no whisper of better days. It is so silent and cold it does not tell me where you have gone. But I know. I can see the truth in front of my eyes but I don't have to embrace it. I will never fall into the warm embrace of your arms, never see a smile light your face or have the comfort of just knowing you're there. Where have you gone?! Why have you left me so alone? Im cold. Don't make me accept the truth let me push it off until you return and prove it wrong, return and tell me you're sorry you were gone so long, Warm me in your embrace just don't leave without saying goodbye. Where have you gone?! WinterWren |
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Obsolete Junior Member
since 2003-06-27
Posts 43 |
Nicely done, hope things turn around soon. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Very good. I loved it, especilly the end. I hope everything will turn out well in the end. ~Lex...  |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Thank you for the replies! In case any future readers are wondering, no, this isn't about breaking up. WinterWren |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
very nice work. i really liked the last stanza. and i know exactely how you feel, im at that point right now myself. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
well I personally got the feeling that this poem was about someone deing suddenly without getting time to make there goodbyes and the anguish that your going through and if I have hit the mark than I am truley sorry, I know what it feels like to have someone you loved dearly ripped away from you too soon. As you can tell I had a lot of emotions that I was feeling through this poem, yet another wonderfully written one from you. Full of emotion and the flow and rythm were right on. ~Live and Laugh~ The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Yes, that's what it's about. Not getting to say goodbye, and, as the title suggested, too shocked and angry to accept the truth. Thank you so much for the reply and understanding, you don't know how much they mean to me. WinterWren |
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Song_for_Serenity Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 97USA |
This was a beautiful poem. I'm sorry that you are experiencing this kind of pain. I hope that your days turn brighter. Have a spiffy one! ~Angela |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
i liked this poem it displays a feeling or emotion vary well as you read keep posting |
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Alnilam Member
since 2003-07-04
Posts 75 |
i loved it, but not knowing the pain your going through. good luck with things. thanks for the read.  ~*Alnilam*~ |
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