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WinterWren
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0 posted 2003-07-09 06:51 PM



I feel so empty without you
I have no one to hold on to
Why did you do this to me,
why have you taken hope?
Tomorrow holds no promise,
no whisper of better days.

It is so silent and cold
it does not tell me where you have gone.
But I know.
I can see the truth in front of my eyes
but I don't have to embrace it.

I will never fall into the warm embrace of your arms,
never see a smile light your face
or have the comfort of just knowing you're there.
Where have you gone?!

Why have you left me so alone?
Im cold.
Don't make me accept the truth
let me push it off until you return and prove it wrong,
return and tell me you're sorry you were gone so long,
Warm me in your embrace
just don't leave without saying goodbye.

Where have you gone?!


WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

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1 posted 2003-07-09 07:21 PM


Nicely done, hope things turn around soon.
Lexy
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2 posted 2003-07-09 09:34 PM


Very good. I loved it, especilly the end. I hope everything will turn out well in the end.
~Lex...

WinterWren
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3 posted 2003-07-10 12:10 PM


Thank you for the replies!
In case any future readers are wondering, no, this isn't about breaking up.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

dertah
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4 posted 2003-07-10 01:07 PM


very nice work.  i really liked the last stanza.  and i know exactely how you feel, im at that point right now myself.
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5 posted 2003-07-10 10:56 PM


well I personally got the feeling that this poem was about someone deing suddenly without getting time to make there goodbyes and the anguish that your going through and if I have hit the mark than I am truley sorry, I know what it feels like to have someone you loved dearly ripped away from you too soon. As you can tell I had a lot of emotions that I was feeling through this poem, yet another wonderfully written one from you. Full of emotion and the flow and rythm were right on.
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The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

WinterWren
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6 posted 2003-07-10 11:02 PM


Yes, that's what it's about.
Not getting to say goodbye, and, as the title suggested, too shocked and angry to accept the truth.
Thank you so much for the reply and understanding, you don't know how much they mean to me.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

Song_for_Serenity
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since 2003-05-28
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7 posted 2003-07-11 03:46 PM


This was a beautiful poem. I'm sorry that you are experiencing this kind of pain. I hope that your days turn brighter. Have a spiffy one!

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

Deep_Inside
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8 posted 2003-07-11 07:52 PM


i liked this poem it displays a feeling or emotion vary well as you read keep posting
Alnilam
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9 posted 2003-07-11 08:10 PM


i loved it, but not knowing the pain your going through. good luck with things. thanks for the read.

~*Alnilam*~
"The worst tragedy for a poet is to be admired through being misunderstood."

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