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Teen Poetry #6

untitled (any ideas?)

Lindsay
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since 2003-03-26

Posts 59
South Dakota

0 posted 2003-04-16 09:13 PM

I said I love you and I still do
But I can't take this pain
It's cutting through my heart like a million sharp knives
I'm tired of crying myself to sleep everynight
It seems your always on my mind
I love you, but I don't want to get hurt again

[This message has been edited by Lindsay (04-16-2003 10:05 PM).]

jaysh
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since 2003-04-16

Posts 133
IL, USA

1 posted 2003-04-16 10:24 PM

I really like your poem, its simple easy to relate to, about the title hmmm...hard maybe something like "The Pain Of Love" or something like that

Paragon
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since 2003-02-16

Posts 114

2 posted 2003-04-16 11:06 PM

Good poem, as for the name,
"I fear I love you"
"Love I fear you"

Jeremy Halstead
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since 2000-06-01

Posts 569
Morris, Ill. U.S.A

3 posted 2003-04-17 03:23 AM

Lindsay, call this poem
"My Love Within Our Past"
....that's just my idea...good poem

J.H.

Curse not upon love, for it is the greatest of great things. Be it not love that curses you....but thy lack thereof. -J.D.H.

Honey
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since 2001-10-09

Posts 92
Hot girl From Canada

4 posted 2003-04-17 12:30 PM

Hey you dont know me but i read your poem. good write, and as for the title how about pain is love?

sing'n fool
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since 2003-04-17

Posts 82
Morris, Il

5 posted 2003-04-17 08:23 PM

Great job! I really enjoyed it. You don't know me but I'll be looking for more of your work.

you love him. you hate him for things he may have done or said. broken promises. Sounds like a "Conflict of the heart." that's my thought.

Sing'n fool

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

6 posted 2003-04-17 10:12 PM

"Twisted Heart"? sorry I'm not good at coming up with titles, but I did like the poem.
Jenni

You are what you make yourself to be.

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

7 posted 2003-04-19 12:53 PM

I really enjoyed this poem! Maybe "I Don't Want to Return to the Pain," ??...I don't know, I'm not very good with titles...but I liked the poem either way. Nice write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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