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So far, yet so far.
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So far, yet so far. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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So far, yet so far. I enjoyed the uncomfortable silence as we sat in love yet worlds apart. even kittens can kill |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
It's short and kinda confusing but I like it. Jenni You are what you make yourself to be. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Heh yeah, it is kind of short, but I really don't think that size matters *waits for the inevitable jokes to pass*. What matters is the meaning, the emotion and the feel of the peice. Thanks for the reply, it is really appreciated.  Andrew |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
I enjoyed this. It didn't need to be any longer because you got the point across nicely. Just another argument between two people in love. They know they will work it out, but for now why talk to each other. It works. ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for the reply, I like the interpretation by the way Andrew |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
Y'know, Andrew...I've always been able to read your poetry quite fluently...and interperet it in my mind, just PERFECTLY. Although, discribing and saying, out loud, what I think it all means is tough. And I agree, it's short---but get's the job done. *giggles* The world is good, and nothing bad ever happens! |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Hey Alex, thanks for the reply |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I liked it, simple yet elegant. It stuck a nerve in me for I've been going through something like this at the present. Well written in my opinion, short and yet it expresses a lot. ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Thank you for your reply, I am glad you enjoyed the read. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"as we sat in love yet worlds apart." I don't quite know why, perhaps it's the past, but this struck a chord in me. I'm really liking the way that you're doing the short poem thing; it honestly works very well for you. This is definitely going into my library. Very well done, Andrew. Very well done Life may be hard, but it's your attitude that determines your happieness |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
The short ones are often the better ones... I really liked this. So much said within so few lines. Don't think I've seen you around much lately, but it's nice seeing you around Thanks for posting. - Cody - |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Again, a beautifully written piece that captures some of the feelings that even longer poems lack. It's to the point, yet open for thought. A pleasure to read. Sometimes the smallest things have the greatest influence. Leah  ps- loved the redundant title. I'm putting this one in my library.  |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
I'm really into saying as little as possible at the moment. A few influences coming into play I think. Thanks for the replies, they are much appreciated Andrew |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Very good! It's amazing how a few words can describe something better than an entire book. Nice write! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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