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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
What constitutes pain? Is it watching the one you love, Love somebody else? Or having all of your choices made for you, By someone you don’t trust? Is it missing someone you used to know, When they’re standing right next to you? Or your “friends” laughs at your screams, When you snap you arm in half? Is it the death of a loved one, Or some kid down the street? When you realize you can’t take it anymore, And you kind of, just, give up? Is it the tears rolling down our cheeks, Or what’s inside that cause them? The scars on your wrist from the razor blade, Or the scars inside your mind? Is it knowing that somebody really hates you, Or that nobody really loves you? Is it knowing that you are going to die, Or is it even being born? |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Hmm very dark, but I like it  |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
ooh...I like. Its dark and painful without sounding like you're just complaining. good job. It has my vote. Jenni You are what you make yourself to be. |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
ooh...I like. Its dark and painful without sounding like you're just complaining. good job. It has my vote. Jenni You are what you make yourself to be. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I like the darkness of it too. It was a really well depicted poem, nice work ~*~Karen~*~ |
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~*BayBee*~ Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 65In The Clouds... |
Wow, that was deep! It definatly has my vote! Great poem and i wanna read more! |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
I really liked this! I was gonna put my favorite part in here, but there would be too much because I like it all! Good write, and yep ya got my vote. ~Jess  "The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept." |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I loved this, epecially these lines" missing someone you used to know, when their standing right next to you." and " the scars on your wrists, or the scars within your mind."...really good, great emotion. ~lexy |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Pain is loving someone so much that you would do anything to help them, even if it's not what they think they need and then having them hate you for it. I can't think of a pain I've experianced worse then that. Physical pain is meaningless and worthless. Emotional pain. That's where the scars start. Good write. Add one to your total.  ex animo, Aaron IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) I guess everyone has a whole different philosophy on what pain is and therefore it is so difficult to explain! (sad sigh) But know the remedy is out there too in the whole same circulation, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sam, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Halcyon Junior Member
since 2003-04-10
Posts 43Arizona, USA |
Very well written. What gets me most is how these contrasting ideas were put together in questions... how they harshly expose the pains we unfortunately have to go through in life, one time or another, when nothing seems to be going right. Great poem. |
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