Teen Poetry #6 |
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The Rose Tattoo |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK ![]() |
4:48 am and I'm up and about. (Only twelve minutes to go) Here I stand with a dead, grey microcosm at my feet. (Ten minutes) Here at last for a final freefall. (Eight minutes) I kissed you on the forehead and I'm so sorry. (Six minutes) Identify me by a single blue rose etched into my left buttock. (Four minutes) The clouds crack open The sky is calling. (Two minutes) I stretch my arms Half-wishing someone would hold me. Watch me fade. Watch me fade Watch me Watch me Watch..... just watch. (Zero) I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged! |
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SixtiesChick03 Junior Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 49NV |
I liked the different technique you used in writing your poem. I think that could be a good style for your writing. Overall, Iliked your poem. Keep up the good work. |
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Riley![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
I needed an Ellie poem, I haven't read you in so long and I was like whooooo theres an Ellie to read. I love love love love times a bazillion love the style you wrote this in. That is such a cool technique. Great title too, it really drew me in. Loved it..... Riley Windows stained with the fog, words written in by a girl. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggssssss) Oh Eleanor, this is beautiful, sweet friend, the ending is sad but I love the style of this and this deserves to be in Reflections, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eleanor, thank you for sharing! ![]() May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
Great job ![]() Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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jaysh Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 133IL, USA |
yeah I also really liked how you wrote this, and I think it is good and good luck to you with getting in the book, you have my vote, I think you have talent, and keep writing, I look forward to reading more of your work! |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
Nice write! I like the style that you wrote it in! Overall, nice poem. You have my vote! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
A very unique piece... ![]() ![]() _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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