Teen Poetry #6 |
A Broken Person |
OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
A Broken Person It feels worse than a scraped knee This is more than the childhood wound I've lived with all my life. As the scar fades my pain reopens And this never goes away It hurts with the passion that caused it. Open and raw, I can find no bandage. Broken and bleeding, But disappeared to all but me I try to cover it but it won't heal And I am reminded forever That I am a broken person. Wow... I didn't know a person could be as upset as I am right now. I've been sleeping for about 24 hours so I don't really know how that looks but go with it anyway. [This message has been edited by OtherSideOfTheMirror (04-27-2003 04:58 PM).] |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
"As the scar fades my pain reopens..." Ooooo, I really like that right there! Showed plenty of emotion. Great write! ~Jess "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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mindy Junior Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 34VA, US |
I really enjoyed this poem...I believe that it really gives you a "visual emotion." It's like I can almost see the scar...and also feel what it is that won't go away...it truly left me feeling...broken...Great job! |
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Jeremy Halstead Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 569Morris, Ill. U.S.A |
sorry your so upset.....maybe you need some sleep!jk. You poem looks great...nice job. Jeremy Be it in the truest form, or a desperate lack thereof, fail not to understand that the inspiration is love. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Wow. This definitely had a lot of emotion in it. I could feel your pain, and being broken isn't a very good way to feel. I hope that things turn around for you and everything gets worked out. Thanks for posting - Cody - |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Hey stalker. I'm sorry you feel so badly right now. Things will get better, I promise. I really liked this. The fact that you expressed the pain you are feeling so well, really sticks out. I'm glad you entered this, that way I can vote for it. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I know you might have heard this many times over, but I'll still say it... Sometimes, time is the only factor that can heal your wounds. As time passes and one matures, you'll realise that whatever that had once hurt you so badly may not be as bad as it once seemed. It MAY even be a blessing in disguise. _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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