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tornskirt
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since 2003-03-30
Posts 87


0 posted 2003-04-04 08:13 PM


so much to tell
so many stories
painful realizations
obscure frustrations
the guys in their rooms
the girls on the streets
selling their bodies
to pay for their food
having their children
stuffing them in
garbage bags
leave them for dead
to die all alone
weep not for the memory
cold murder
but they do not understand
they do not know
they have given up
a part of themselves
given their life
burning in hell
wracked with disease
dying in the streets
alone
flute musics drifts
from a nearby store
as she lets him
have her
take her
and when it's over
30 bucks
and she'll go on
to stand out on
her corner
selling her body
telling her story
and when she's had
too much
she'll die alone
on a cold street corner
somewhere
anywhere
but never here


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2gd4uand2gd2beat
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since 2003-04-01
Posts 10

1 posted 2003-04-04 09:04 PM


Hey, this was okay writing...pretty powerful...but pretty good. Wouldn't mind reading some more. LOL
EleanorMoonbaby
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since 2002-09-02
Posts 202
England, UK
2 posted 2003-04-05 10:52 AM


This is a very powerful piece, it will be interesting to see how your writing develops. Quite a controversial subject matter for teen
Ellie

I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged!

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3 posted 2003-04-05 03:00 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) It is so very sad but true, dearest friend, and it saddens me how an evil capitalist world can make so many have to live this way and have people do depressing things in order to stay alive when in fact they are getting worse! (sad sigh) I pray someday this whole system will fail, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

carol
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since 2003-01-25
Posts 624
Florida USA
4 posted 2003-04-12 07:14 PM


Good write but so sad

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

[This message has been edited by carol (04-12-2003 07:15 PM).]

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