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Teen Poetry #6

I'm Glad It's You

2gd4uand2gd2beat
Junior Member

since 2003-04-01

Posts 10

0 posted 2003-04-01 08:20 PM

Green or blue,
Just as long as they belong to you.
Happy as ever,
But sad never.
We are teens, we've been through the same,
Even playing that game.
Now when your in love it takes time to heal,
Just like a wound takes time to seal.
You're not like other guys,
Unlike them, you don't tell lies.
I dunno what it is about you,
I like you the way you like me too.
Your smile to sweet,
So nice, so meek.
You're so kind,
That it almost makes me blind.
Blind in love,
Like a white snowy dove.
This is to you,
You'll have no clue.

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

1 posted 2003-04-01 08:28 PM

I enjoyed the first half of this poem but I didnt really like the ending, I dont know why.

I'm just kickin it up

leighsa
Member

since 2003-02-27

Posts 74
Oregon, United States Of America

2 posted 2003-04-01 08:46 PM

This also was a good write, i under stand what you are feeling and i am glad for you.. hopfully it alwasy stays with you....
ashgiel

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-04-01 09:18 PM

I liked this one! Had a nice flow to it and it was very sweet, I would try working on the ending a little bit though, it seems to just cut off mid thought. Other than that good write
~Live and Laugh~

People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today.
~Bella~

SweetGhettoFlurt
Junior Member

since 2003-03-30

Posts 15
Milw,WI

4 posted 2003-04-02 09:31 AM

It wuz a very nice poem but i didnt think the ending wuz that kewl.

*~*[email protected]*~*Marie*~*

2gd4uand2gd2beat
Junior Member

since 2003-04-01

Posts 10

5 posted 2003-04-04 02:48 PM

Well all I have to say is...my feelings came out that way and thats how they ended up on paper. It flowed out of my hands like water in a stream....just went on and on. Just gimme a break...I've only done this for at least 1/2 or 1 year. Thats it! But thanks for your replies.
Luv Bobby

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