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Everything So Heavenly
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Everything So Heavenly |
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2gd4uand2gd2beat Junior Member
since 2003-04-01
Posts 10 |
Heavenly eyes so green, And the most beautiful smile I'd ever seen. So strong that no one can take that away. Heavenly soul so pure and so true, Love for the people, for me and for you. To me, the perfect angel with a heavenly heart. My dream is to one day be able to fly, So I could reach the stars in the sky. Especially the star that shined on me, The most beautiful light that will ever be. That could be you, or the children of today and tomarrow, But lets not cry tears of sorrow. Because living in a world we didn't make, Can make for a cause thats filled with hate. Never give up on people you love, Just like the heavenly dove. And just like you. A person with a heavenly heart, With no love being torn apart. |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
This is my favorite so far from you. Wonderful emotion showed throughout this one, well done! ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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X Q poet Junior Member
since 2003-03-25
Posts 47 |
Heya... Nice... A lot's being said here... I lost the rythm a couple of times though, and it seems like you switch between rhyme and non-rhyme... Wouldn't it be wise to choose one of them? Otherwise it was nice... Lots of emotion and feelings...  |
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2gd4uand2gd2beat Junior Member
since 2003-04-01
Posts 10 |
It doesn't have to rhyme and be free for the whole thing....that was my free and in my free writing...I do anything I want. Anything that makes sence. If you think that the endings are bad then do not take your "pretty" time to read them. Thanks for the reply anyways.  Luv Bobby |
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