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HeroicVillan
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since 2002-11-09
Posts 34
Lost.....
0 posted 2003-03-25 08:29 PM


im trying out this kinda strange format, sooo... bear with me and let me know if you like it...

A substanial illusion
A never ending conclusion
A forgotten memory

The very brightest of the dark
The slight off-center mark
The useless remedy

A help that hurts us all
A rail that makes you fall
A humorless comedy

The beginning has now ended
The broken heart now mended
The focused reverie
© Copyright 2003 James Bicknell - All Rights Reserved
Drummerboy06
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since 2003-03-23
Posts 46
Indiana
1 posted 2003-03-26 12:40 PM

I like, metinks.  This is good, lots of double meanings, yet they all make sense!  You are an amazing poet from what I have read so far, and i look forward to seeing more peices of this magnitude.  Magnificent poem, keep up the good work.

Half the world is composed of people who have something to say and can't, and the other half who have nothing to say and keep on saying it. - Robert F
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