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pearl6884
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since 2003-03-23
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California coast

0 posted 2003-03-23 03:52 PM


I am a woman now,  
   But the little girl still sleeps inside
  When can i get over this
  When will my past be through
   Why do i seem to resist?
   Can this hole be filled?
   I seem to think this is routine
    How can I live fulfilled
     When i keep having these dreams
   But i already moved on.
    But this life's journey,
    I know will be long.
   My heart is strong, so is my mind
    But still frustration is walking behind.
    And here no sense in giving in
    Because inside this little girl
     Lies a woman within.

[This message has been edited by pearl6884 (03-24-2003 12:32 AM).]

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1 posted 2003-03-24 01:42 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Sarah, this is so very heartwrenchingly beautiful, sweet friend, always nurture the spirit of the girl in you and let innocence fly as every graceful women has that spirit in her! (wipes tears) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send many angel hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sarah, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

PoeTik JusTice
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since 2003-01-05
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2 posted 2003-03-24 02:04 PM


This was a great poem! You have a lot of talent.  The opening is so strong and brings you right into the poem, and the ending is perfect! Great job! You definitely have my vote on this.  

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

pearl6884
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since 2003-03-23
Posts 72
California coast
3 posted 2003-03-27 11:08 AM


Thanks for reading! Have a nice day!

*To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...*
-Blake

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4 posted 2003-03-27 12:35 PM


I'm loving your poetry, pearl, but one word of advice. The voting is set up so that your first entry gets the majority of votes, the second poem gets half, the third gets a third, the fourth a quarter, and on and on and on. If you post more than three poems, you're dividing up your main votes among all these other ones, and you're basically dooming your chances of getting a poem into the book. If I were you, I'd erase all but one or two of your poems, and you'll see your tallys grow.

Mike

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5 posted 2003-04-21 02:36 AM


I understand this well....
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
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Lost and Broken
6 posted 2003-04-21 07:01 PM


I understand this completely. I relate...Nice work...very good write.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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