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The Heart of The Beast
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The Heart of The Beast |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada 
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The lake ripples in the breeze, once in this water there was happiness now lives betrayal the sky is dark in this place the rain never stops the thunder crahes into me an introduction to my disease there is blood on this trail whimpering and broken the wind storms against my back Thousands of years have past your back covered in lash marks the sun narrows you're blinded in desperation there is no more fire The conquest is now dead Lying under the willow blood congealing the flies have found their next meal fingers curved over his chest eyes the color of rubies The hour slip by so slowly midnight catches hold his body rises the myth his voice howls nothingness he moves as still as death Snap back to the future the memory of his past burns his heart the undead the unrealistic fairytale the heart The skies are black, the sun has exploded a love story lost the mists of yesterday gone, Nightmares... The heart of the beast continues to thrive.... Regina Note: well, yes,...that is a very weird poem....meh...hope you enjoyed it. "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I absolutely loved this! Definitely unique, but a good thing! There are a few little errors is all I see, otherwise it's awesome! Got my vote!  XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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Starsfalling Member
since 2003-03-18
Posts 94some where deep in the shadows |
hmm weird is only what u make of it... or maybe it was normal? normal seems to fit everything to someone hehe well there i go babbling again.. im not very good at critiques if thats what ur looking for... i really enjoyed the poem though and will definitly look for more of ur work -lance I only wish i hadnt felt so alive.. that way I couldnt feel so dead when you left |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
very different (love your picture) |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Definately different, not neccesarily weird.  |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Hey you  I'm definitely voting for this one  I love the imagery in this one! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssssss) For now this will be the situation, but know soon the gentle butterfly of love will come suckling on the flowers of your dreams again and the sweet gentle grace will believe it or not chase the beast away! (sad sigh) I send heart hugs and my vote your way, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Regina, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Enjoyed. Dawn |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Long and short to read, but enjoyed nonetheless! It reminded me of a scene in William Golding's Lord of the Flies (which my english class last year over analyzed and wrecked the very essence of the book) where the children are trying to kill each other...  Okay, maybe not the best of scenes to mention, but the tone of the poem just reminded me of it. Liked it muchly!Leah  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this very much. (misspelled crashes) You get my vote!!  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ina, I enjoyed this very much, and hope to read for from you. Good luck on your submission, as I think it's a fine addition to the Reflections poetry book. Kacy |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
You should be posting in Dark. Maybe you do ... I haven't been around that way in a while. I love this. |
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Tabitha LeAnn Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50Kansas, USA |
I absoulutly loved this poem. It was a little different but in a very good way!!! I will be looking for more of your work in the future. |
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