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The Cost
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The Cost |
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HeroicVillan Junior Member
since 2002-11-09
Posts 34Lost..... |
What do you suppose could come from rhymes and prose. How could it amount, to all that lifes about. What is in a knife, that steals a human life. What could steal our breath, but a world lined in death. I hope for all our souls, we accept the cost of goals. And when we see, our reflection, we can glance with some affection... |
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Rdz9 Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142MT, USA |
Very good, but it sounds like you wanted to say more, like you werent finished yet.... |
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CSwtThng Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124 |
Nice poem!!!! |
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Echo Junior Member
since 2003-02-20
Posts 14the abyss |
i love the questioning, but it does seem to go a lil fast. gj. |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Like others said, it seems unfinished. Perhaps if you continued... Regina "heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello |
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