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HeroicVillan
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since 2002-11-09
Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2003-03-17 09:26 PM


What do you suppose
could come from rhymes and prose.
How could it amount,
to all that lifes about.
What is in a knife,
that steals a human life.
What could steal our breath,
but a world lined in death.
I hope for all our souls,
we accept the cost of goals.
And when we see, our reflection,
we can glance with some affection...


© Copyright 2003 James Bicknell - All Rights Reserved
Rdz9
Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 142
MT, USA
1 posted 2003-03-18 01:03 AM


Very good, but it sounds like you wanted to say more, like you werent finished yet....
CSwtThng
Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124

2 posted 2003-03-19 01:03 AM


Nice poem!!!!
Echo
Junior Member
since 2003-02-20
Posts 14
the abyss
3 posted 2003-03-19 10:47 PM


i love the questioning, but it does seem to go a lil fast. gj.
Ina
Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada
4 posted 2003-03-20 10:05 AM


Like others said, it seems unfinished. Perhaps if you continued...

Regina

"heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello

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