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The Unknown |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
Although it seems I am just a girl There’s so much more inside And only those I truly love Can know the fears I hide The hurt and pain of everyday The tears I cry alone These are things I only tell To the one, the only, the unknown The one who never speaks Never breathes or hears The one that isn’t there at all But helps take away my tears This thought of one that could be there But has yet to be found Is all a dream, and nothing more There’s not a soul around It’s love in itself that helps you deal It’s job is never done And until I find this thing called love I won’t tell my fears to any one **************************** I don't know how I feel about this poem..any comments would be greatly appreciated!!! Thanks, Jenn |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
"The one who never speaks Never breathes or hears The one that isn’t there at all But helps take away my tears" This whole piece is done well, though there were some rhythm problems when I read it. I liked the lines above the best  Laura "All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life." |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I liked the lines that laura quoted as well. I also like the whole theme, sad, but with a touch of hope. great piece. ~Lexy |
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Trapped New Member
since 2003-03-13
Posts 4Florida |
The whole poem was wubable  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Jenn~ Nice job on this piece. I very much enjoyed the read. Well done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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DarkSide_Blues Junior Member
since 2003-03-08
Posts 41Fl, Usa. |
Excellent. I know alot of people who think along the same lines as this peice. You've conveyed raw emotion into text. ^_~ Congratulations! Btw..<_< >_> I'm albino too..I feel the pain..LOL ^___^ \V/. |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
I think the same way, very nice and touching poem ~*~Karen~*~ |
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Silent~Inspirations Junior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 13 |
I loved this poem... It was just so great. Keep writting. |
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