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Teen Poetry #6

Ironically ( Challenge )

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2003-03-12 08:22 PM

( it isn't funny but I think its good o well )

if only my child had a name
to play with the other child game
playing in the sand trap
opening her big yap
i know i will never be the same

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

1 posted 2003-03-18 02:06 AM

Hi, Riley! Good to see you here.

I'm not sure that I completely understand what
you're trying to say with this piece, but I like
it anyway. Made me think, and that's a good thing.

Thanks for participating in the challenge.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

2 posted 2003-03-18 07:17 PM

quote:
if only my child had a name
to play with the other child game
playing in the sand trap
opening her big yap
i know i will never be the same

Ok Vicky, lets see if I can explain this.

The first lines refers to the fact that all children blend in with each other basically.
Then the next line says that maybe if she had a name she could play with everyone else as herself.
Playing in the sand trap means just being with other people.
Opening her big yap, is telling everyone about herself.
And then I will never been the same, means that I have been forever changed by the girl.

Hope that helps.

Ri

Windows stained with the fog, words written in by a girl.

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