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Prime Meridian
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Prime Meridian |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
A double blast from cannons Concerned with cultivating mindless souls And carrying out the crimes and corruption Bringing with it the corrosion of Kingdoms Pulled enough intolerance To open up a brand new door Of War. Here I am in the middle of it all Abusive... Pill Popping... Binge Drinking... And Weed Smoking... Parents. In caught in the Prime Meridian Of two side who fight with each other And then turn on their own kind. And when they self destruct They blame it on the innocent in the middle Who was only trying to make peace PEACE IS DEAD! This is about the whole world I'm just using bad parents as a metaphor I have experienced them both Bad parents and a rotting world. A girl two and a half minutes away Gets punched in her jaw that day after her Birthday And by who? DEAR OL' DAD! Fast-forward... Another girl, living in Toledo, who loves a boy, Repeatedly gets ravished emotionally By a mother who is mad at her... BECAUSE OF HER OWN PAST! Meanwhile the boy she loves tells his Mom That he doesn't really want to live anymore AND HIS MOTHER DARES HIM TO COMMIT A SELF SACRIFICE! "Why don't you just do it then?" There I am his only comfort One a warm summer's night Incubated with sadness I didn't talk much Just listened. He was hard to comprehend, however Because he was choking on suicidal sobs Its ok, I like to think I saved his life sometimes. That’s why I'm the Prime Meridian I remain the stronghold in the middle I'm here to listen, and try to mend them, To intertwine their lives in mine And make the sun rise on their aching emotions So I guess this wasn't about the world My whole world is right here... In my heart My world stays spinning with my friends’ breath ALL OF THEM! As for the world outside of me Something has to give PEACE IS DEAD! You can chase it with all your committees and protests. But when the whole world is dead... THERE'S YOUR PEACE! |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
This was Extremely powerful...Wow. Being the prime meridian would definitely be a tough place to stay. Good work! XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
This one was written a little differently than your other poems it seems to me. I didn't like this one as much as some of your others as far as flow and rythm goes, but I LOVED the message you were sending out here, It powerful and meaningfull and I enjoyed reading this a great deal! ~Live and Laugh~ People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) I too wouldn't want to be there, or the Equator in that matter, I want to be like the Tropic of Capricorn and slowly work to merge with the Equator and hope peace again can come in the long run! (sad sigh) There is no peace now, but we could be much more closer if that Bush can stop being so adamant about war, this has my vote, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sam, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (03-13-2003 10:43 AM).] |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Wow, you certainly put a lot of thought into this piece. Well done! |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
I liked it. You obviously put a lot of thought into this idea, and you express your ideas well. What bothered me was the first stanza. It didn't seem to have a point, so I wasn't able to understand the direction in which you were headed. However, the first stanza seemed to be written quite poetically, despite the confusion. The rest of the poem was good. Leah  |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Wow...this is a VERY powerful piece. I could hear the voice behind the words, loud and clear. Well done. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Silent~Inspirations Junior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 13 |
I loved your poem. It was metaphorically creative and sent a strong message that needs to be sent more often. I'd give you a thumbs up if you could see it, so instead you can give yourself one. |
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carol Senior Member
since 2003-01-25
Posts 624Florida USA |
 Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become |
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SilentTears Member
since 2003-02-15
Posts 371Lost and Broken |
This is such a moving poem. I felt it the whole way through. It's depressing to think about all the infinite problems going on in the world...and you captured these problems in the palm of your hand. Wonderful poem. Give yourself a pat on the back for this one. It's got my vote! As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me |
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StephyBob07 Junior Member
since 2003-04-18
Posts 37Texas |
whoa, this poem blew me away. i really could feel your pain. so incredible. u have my vote! ~stephy Dreaming is the best thing you can do. |
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