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Confidence In Strength
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Confidence In Strength |
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Trouble Breathing Member
since 2002-11-12
Posts 63 |
I was once told, You’re confusing love with lust, Soon you’ll be left behind in the dust, I’ve showed them all now They always told me, Life is not a game, But if this is no game, You better stop complaining when you lose When you think you’ve lost it all, It comes right back again, The strength to go another day, Is all you need to get through today Someday you’ll have all you wished for Is what I wish I could say Well you better work for it, But mistakes happen everyday |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
Very well written, it made me think, and it is very true, nice poem ~*~Karen~*~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) I love all the contradictions and beg to differs placed in this, dearest friend, there is always two ways to think in every situation, this is well-said, you have my vote, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
this is cool, i really like the beginning think about this: everyone you know will someday die. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The strength to go another day, Is all you need to get through today One day at a time. *S* I like this a lot... well written! |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
If you were looking for a rhyming scheme, i don't think you quiet got it. some lines rhymed and others seemes to be jsut shoved in. It seemed to be lacking something. the ideas were great and the images just the nitty-gritty details struck me as weak. Regina "Despite all my rage I am still just a rat in a cage, Then someone will say what is lost can never be saved" |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
They always told me, Life is not a game, But if this is no game, You better stop complaining when you lose Indeed, I agree. I enjoyed the read of this. It gets my vote.  |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
good job..thanks for the read!!!! Jenn **Hope is what Shields us from the harsh realities of life** |
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scarlet fire New Member
since 2003-03-07
Posts 2 |
I really liked your poem. I think it was very well writen and it makes a lot of sense. |
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