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Their Job/Your Job
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Their Job/Your Job |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA 
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Again, please be as hard as you want, I'm still tryin to wake up my muse, she's bein stuborn, little butt munch. --------------------------------------------------- They want you to break down To roll over for them To admit you are broken It's their job They manipulate your mind The only way you will get your uniform Is by breaking It's their job They want your mind to break Your body to break Your spirit to break It's their job But don't let them fool you Don't let them break you Rather allow them to think your broken It's your job They're really not trying to break you Only make you better Make you stronger It's their job For with no spirit No mind or body Your not a Marine Just another burnt out shell Could have been a Marine Could have been a soldier But you weren't strong enough To do your job Read my work and read my thoughts |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
This is really nice. I especially like the repetition "It's their job/It's your job" inbetween each verse, it linked nicely without being there just for the sake of it. I was a little confused by the 'Uniform' line until I read further... It's also a nice theme, something different and yet at the same time identifyable. Well done. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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