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Teen Poetry #6

Dogmatic

Triskaidekaphobia
Member

since 2003-02-05

Posts 251
In a state of disrepair...

0 posted 2003-02-26 07:32 AM

While I must admit
You have me hooked
Like a fresh caught fish.
I am unable to justify
Your overload of dogma
On to my karma.

I know you believe in a Trinity
So do I, but I hesitate to mention
You and your sister,
In the same bed
Just in case I get slapped.

Your religious whine
Becomes repetitive
And all I want
Is your silent breath
Breaking commandments
By my ear.

I know you believe in a Messiah,
So do I, but I hesitate to comment
That I am he,
Pharmaceutical avatar
That no one noticed.

I must admit,
That I will gut you
Like a fish.
I am able to justify
My karma running over your
Dogma.

There should be a psychology of feet. For do we not make decisions with our legs and walk about on our brains? What do you mean "No, not really"?

AngelShell
Member

since 2000-03-01

Posts 446
not heaven nor hell so...

1 posted 2003-02-27 01:10 AM

This is really nice.
I especially liked the:
"...all I want
Is your silent breath
Breaking Commandments
By my ear"
That passage is really, really good.
The ideas here are once again quite controversial and yet completely intentifiable and well executed.

Well done!

~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~

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