Teen Poetry #6 |
The DEP |
BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
I'm tryin to come out of writer's block so feel free to be hard on this one. I used the one thing I know allot about right now to write on. Bear with me here people. --------------------------------------------------- Keep going Don't you dare stop Move it Not Basic More like pre Basic They want you ready Recruter pushes you till you colaps He will not let you give up He wants you to have the title you want In your mind you think you can't do it Your body screams for rest Your lungs ache from the work you give them Your heart pushes you Longing to bear the title that you seak It wants the pin just as much as you do What makes it all worth it? All the pain All the times you vomit from working so much Knowing that soon you will be able to claim that pin That the uniform will be yours That you will be recognized by every one You will one of the few One of the proud A Marine Read my work and read my thoughts |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
intersting...i think the ideas good but it seems a little...choppy? i don't know maybe its just me. hope i helped at least a little. Jenn think about this: everyone you know will someday die. |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
Now that you mention it, it does seem choppy, I'm workin on makin this one better, I think my muse don't want to come out in the cold weather or she forgot to wake up. lol Thanks Jen!! Read my work and read my thoughts |
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