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gummidemilo
New Member

since 2003-02-25

Posts 9

0 posted 2003-02-25 12:56 PM

“Have faith,” they say “And live God’s will
And you will see the Gates,
A lifetime full of piety
Brings peace to he who waits”

Spend fourscore years (Well, give or take)
On a tiny, spinning sphere
And thou shalt be rewarded
By the Cosmic Engineer

With an eternity of harps and wings
And singing seraphim
For living just like Jesus did
And loving God like him

But life itself is transient
And the universe extends
Past lakes and moons and galaxies
Past the darkness with no end

And our time alive is but a spark
In the fire of evermore
And when we’re gone that ageless flame
Endures just like before

So why should we, as tiny specks
Anticipate rebirth?
With all the beauty that surrounds
Our heaven’s here on earth

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2003-02-25 02:36 AM

Very book worthy piece, and your last line speaks volumes to those who will listen. Great job!

~* Carpe' Diem *~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

2 posted 2003-02-25 09:49 AM

(smiles) Yay!!! Yws, we must embrace life to the fullest and captivate each moment like there's no tomorrow and we may not be reincarnated afterward, for life is too precious! (big huggssssssss) This is wonderfully and wisely said, sweet friend, you have my proud vote, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

3 posted 2003-02-25 02:48 PM

That poem really makes me think, it was beautifully written, I look forward to reading more of your poems.

Munda
Member Elite

since 1999-10-08

Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands

4 posted 2003-02-25 04:50 PM

Great poem!

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

5 posted 2003-02-25 07:03 PM

I don't agree with this, but the poem itself is quite good and has my vote.

Jenn

think about this: everyone you know will someday die.

Chloey
Member

since 2002-09-29

Posts 74
in a silver mustang convertible

6 posted 2003-02-25 08:13 PM

Very nice and that last line was very heart touching!

*$*Chloey*$*

If you don't like the way I am.....screw you!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2003-02-26 02:59 PM

Amen.

I think you have more than enough spirituality to go around, if this poem is anything to go by.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

8 posted 2003-02-27 12:32 PM

Wow!! I read your other poem yesterday and I was blown away and I think I like this one even better if that gives a clue as to the good vibes I'm sending your way! This is so beautifully written and so thought proviking..I could go on all day about what I absolutly love about this poem. And a terrific and meaningful message in the last line, bravo. Kudos to you!
~Live and Laugh~

People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today.
~Bella~

gummidemilo
New Member

since 2003-02-25

Posts 9

9 posted 2003-02-27 12:41 PM

thank you very much. i honestly have no experience with writing poetry.. but I've been inspired recently on a couple occasions to express what I was feeling, and I guess you could say I surprised myself.

Albino_Jenn
Member

since 2003-03-03

Posts 105
Ontario, Canada

10 posted 2003-03-16 01:20 PM

This was a great poem, keep up the good work!!!!
Jenn

**Hope is what Shields us from the harsh realities of life**

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

11 posted 2003-03-16 08:43 PM

A wonderful piece....great for the book!
~Hugs~

~ Trace my body with your words..
And in doing so, you touch my heart. ~

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

12 posted 2003-03-18 12:43 PM

Wow, great write! You have alot of talent! This poem was written very beautifully and I absolutely loved it!

Nice work!! Earns a vote.

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

13 posted 2003-03-18 01:41 PM

Wonderful write. Definatly book material. Really makes you think when you read this one, thanks for makin my brain work for once!!

Great write!!!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

14 posted 2003-03-30 05:27 PM

Well done, gummi. Nicely written and worthy of a vote.

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