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Teen Poetry #6

She belongs to me

molly_the_dolly
Junior Member

since 2003-02-12

Posts 25
Ontario, Canada

0 posted 2003-02-16 12:46 PM

I belong to she.
People tell me I am the image of her,
but she is nothing like me.
I love her, I hate her,
I need her, she is apart of me.
When she was here,
I never wanted her near.
Now that shes gone,
my life is like a sad country song.
Why have there been so many men?
Time, jerry and ben.
She belongs to me,
I am everything like she.
How many daughters does she have in her life?
NO! she doesn't care,
she just wants to be his wife.

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

1 posted 2003-02-17 09:26 PM

Awwwww...
This has a very soft touch and was well worded in my opinion...
Good job with this.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2003-02-24 05:45 PM

This was sad. Is this in reference to your mother? That's what I understood.
I liked the poem. I thought there was a lot of emotion within it.
Very well done.

Look at the sun and burn your eyes. You'll be fine in the end.

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

3 posted 2003-02-24 08:59 PM

this is so sad but you worded it well. sometimes emotions keep the poem from being as good as it could but that didn't happen here. good job.

jenn

think about this: everyone you know will someday die.

Chloey
Member

since 2002-09-29

Posts 74
in a silver mustang convertible

4 posted 2003-02-24 09:09 PM

That is so sad it reminds me of my best friend!

If you don't like the way I am.....screw you!

molly_the_dolly
Junior Member

since 2003-02-12

Posts 25
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2003-02-27 12:47 PM

thank-you very much. yes this is a poem about my mother feelings getting confused and myself not feel as if im improtant to her. this poem let me express them. thankx to those who enjoyed it

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