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*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

0 posted 2003-02-15 11:31 PM

She goes inside I stand in the night
They want her in public and me out of sight
Thought I was pretty now look again
I have become the other friend

Sadly I sit by the phone and wait
While she dresses up for another date
I smile brightly to hide the pain
They all come to me to ask for her name
Thought I was pretty now look again
I have become the other friend

I laugh loudly so that I won't cry
As she once again passes me by
My talents abundant and no one will see
Her looks will always overshadow me
Thought I was pretty now look again
I have become the other friend

My self-esteem can't be taken away
I love myself plenty, at least for today
I know I am pretty, but then again
I will always be the other friend

I don't like this one to much But I was feeling kinda low and had to get it out, comments?

People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today.
~Bella~

molly_the_dolly
Junior Member

since 2003-02-12

Posts 25
Ontario, Canada

1 posted 2003-02-16 01:18 AM

I know exctaly how you feel, im used to that with my best girlfriend. It's kinda like being her shadow. It used to bother me alot, going out with her and the men only looking at her, but now i have a wonderfull man in my life and i know looks are not everything and everyone is beautifull in there own way. Great poem!

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2003-02-20 07:54 PM

Bella~
You've expressed this so very well and in
such a beautifully poetic way.
You are quite talented and I am always impressed
by your writing and this is no exception.
Extremely well done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

3 posted 2003-02-20 07:57 PM

I know what you mean as well...and I've been there. This piece is heartfelt and thanks for sharing...everyone has been there I'm sure.
Well done,
Definitely a keeper!
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2003-02-25 01:10 AM

Very well done here. Me gusto.
I hope things get better for you. Good luck.

Look at the sun and burn your eyes. You'll be fine in the end.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

5 posted 2003-02-25 08:08 AM

I understand immensely.
Good job.

Jenn

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

EleanorMoonbaby
Member

since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

6 posted 2003-02-25 02:58 PM

I like this. The rhyming was there but didn't dominate the poem. Nice one.
My suggestion? Hang around with ugly stupid people who make idiots of themselves in public. I'm usually free. Friends suck anyway, in this lifetime people are only out for what they can get.

This cheery missive was brought to you by Ellie (in a pretty crappy mood)

I'm not dead, OK? I'm just a little electroencephalographically challenged!

frolicking dolphin
Member

since 2003-02-23

Posts 268
my own special world

7 posted 2003-02-25 03:09 PM

I have also hit that low and know exactly how you felt

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

BrokenAngel
Member

since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

8 posted 2003-02-25 03:55 PM

Wow. I know how you feel. I had an ex best friend that was like that. Best thing to do is just get rid of them and keep thinkin that you are pretty honey! Great write!

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

9 posted 2003-02-25 07:07 PM

I know exactly how you feel. And, as someone said, teh rhyme scheme is there but it doesn't overpower the poem. good job.

Jenn

think about this: everyone you know will someday die.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

10 posted 2003-02-26 01:18 AM

Thank you for all the comments, they are much appreciated!I didn't like this one much cause I sounded like I was complaining the whole time and I still think that but it's nice to know that others have shared in the predicament that I am currently in! As always I'm glad to here from you,
Dopey Dope~¿Ha estado hablando usted español largo? Gracias para el cumplido~
~Live and Laugh~

People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today.
~Bella~

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

11 posted 2003-03-04 06:53 PM

soy Puertorriqueno.....asi que, hablo espanol frequentemente

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

12 posted 2003-03-05 03:26 PM

I really really enjoyed this poem. I know exactly how it feels. I'm the shadow to my best friend all the time. But what I've realized is that in the long run, people seem to recognize you and love you for your own unique beauty, no matter whose shadow is casting over you. Lovely poem!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

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