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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
It's rough ladies and gentlemen. I'm just warning you. "Librarian" Book by book my library decays covers yellowed by the passing days gilded letters linger there and remind of the virtues; love and mercy honesty and compassion, that I maligned ideas I thought I held so dear even as I let them disappear Page by page each book crumbles leaving me blind to crawl, to stumble in this darkness I couldn't see the joys of life I had abandoned by arrogance, by pride, by hypocracy and as each page returned to dust I grew ever more debased, more unjust Word by word each page fades until I'm someone else a masquerade you may think that you know me and even though you don't I ask Have you read my entire library? one blank page for me to write this time I'll do it in Black and White. ex animo, Aaron Woodside There are no great men, only men in great circumstances. |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Long time no read. ^^ Loved the imagery here. I could hear the rustling of pages in an almost silent library (but even we are deaf to silence) and the word use...just magical. ^_^ Enjoyed these lines: Word by word each page fades until I'm someone else a masquerade you may think that you know me and even though you don't I ask Have you read my entire library? Very true to the world today...thanks for bringing it home. The meter that you used, the A-A-B-C-B-D-D, threw me off at first. I tried to grasp the rhythm, but it wasn't working. The meter affected the flow in the first stanza, so what I would have suggested is that you bring "of the virtues;" up to the third line so that it became "gilded letters linger there and remind of the virtues". However, it might ruin the rhyming pattern and, well...we wouldn't want to mess with that, would we? o_O; Perhaps you could reword the last part of the third line and the fourth line? I'll let you work it out. ^^ Loved the part about the gilded letters, by the way. ^_^ Question: One blank page for me to write this time I'll do it in Black and White. Could you explain to me what these lines mean, please? I have an idea, but I'd like to know more. I'm intrigued. ^^ Great writing, once again! Looking forward to reading more. ^_^ Leah |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Leah, thnx for the reply. Ya I know about the meter and rhyme scheme. I said it was rough  Personally I usually don't worry as much about those things as I should."However, it might ruin the rhyming pattern and, well...we wouldn't want to mess with that, would we?" Lol, ya I already know of your stance on rhyming poetry, but hey I saw your last post. I agree rhyming poetry is the hardest to write effectivly. I like your suggestions, and I may decide to edit this, since I am planning on submitting a few of my poems to a review for publishment, and I haven't decided which ones to submit.As to your question, well I think I'll have some fun with this one. Tell me what you think they mean. Actually tell me what you think the entire poem is about. >>>Hint<<< "think of a phoenix" It's not a great hint, but with a little imagination I'm sure you'll get it. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI [This message has been edited by aaron woodside (02-06-2003 01:35 AM).] |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Ooh-kay...I'm thinking phoenix...bird. Fire. Fiery bird! Bird on fire...roast bird?  Uhm...trying again.  Phoenix- The capital and largest city of Arizona, in the south-central part of the state northwest of Tucson. Settled cerca 1868, it became territorial capital in 1889 and state capital in 1912. The city is noted as a winter and health resort. Population: 983,403.  No? (And you thought you were having fun with this...  )Okay...trying again. Phoenix- mythological bird living for 500 years, consuming itself in fire, only to rise from its ashes. Reincarnation? Immortality? Hmm...Colour fades. But would black and white be considered colours? If not, writing them in "Black and White" would mean...they would never fade? WAIT! Reliving life. Reincarnation! Reliving life because the past life wasn't lived properly. Word by word each page fades until I'm someone else a masquerade And so Black and White would be the real...you? Another hint please. Leah |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
..I can relate to what your saying. great imagery. I loved the second stanza. I'll be looking at more of your work.. Thanks for sharing. ~Lexy |
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aaron woodside Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 256 |
Leah you pretty much got it, like I figured you would. Black and white fades, but what does it fade to? Simply white. I have one page left to write my life upon, actually one page left to write about this chapter in my life. I will do it in black and white, so that I may regain what I have lost(phoenix, burning up and being reborn ). If you are confused check out my other new poem, and maybe you'll begin to understand where this one came from.Thnx for the replies. ex animo, Aaron Woodside IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI |
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