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barbaraj
Member

since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

0 posted 2003-01-24 08:51 PM

Sea of faces

A sea of faces; they're all the same.

Do I mean more or am I just like the rest?

Either way I'm nothing.

I know all the answers but I'm completely oblivious.

Always the same, never changing.

Do I need to breathe? Do I need to collapse?

Did I ever breathe in the first place?

Disappointment drags behind me like an unending chain,

Just waiting for the chance to catch up.

The only thing I can't understand,

Is all those happy faces, one name or another.

How can they smile in the world of today?

What do they know that I don't?

Maybe I just know too much,

And I've burst my happy bubble

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

1 posted 2003-01-24 09:02 PM

"How can they smile in the world of today?"

What a superb question, my lil' newbie.

"Maybe I just know too much,

And I've burst my happy bubble"

I can relate to these lines.

I enjoyed this piece. Do you want a few thoughts I have on the poem, or do you not want any critiques? Welcome, either way. Welcome, newbie!

~Titus

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
--Aldous Huxley

barbaraj
Member

since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

2 posted 2003-01-24 09:06 PM

thanks. i'd love any thoughts you have about my poem. that's what i'm here for; to learn and grow.

blakloks
Member

since 2002-06-01

Posts 60

3 posted 2003-01-24 10:11 PM

sea of faces; they're all the same.

Do I mean more or am I just like the rest?

Either way I'm nothing.

I so agree with this. Love your poem!

There are so many parts of your poem I like I cant possibly put them all here, but I still love it. It sounds exactly like what I feel.

Thanks so much for writing this

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2003-01-25 04:25 PM

Good first post! Welcome to passions!
I like this poem, yes indeed.
I especially felt the line, "Dissapointment drags behind be like an unending chain."
I can really relate.
Well done!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

barbaraj
Member

since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

5 posted 2003-01-25 09:57 PM

well thanks all for the wonderful comments. i didn't expect my poem to be so well received.

A Person Who Asks A Question Is A Fool For Five Minutes, A Person Who Doesn't Is A Fool Forever ...

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

6 posted 2003-01-26 10:23 PM

"Disappointment drags behind me like an unending chain"

Ooooh, do I know this one. I like this poem as a whole, and I'd like to see you around here a bit

I'll lay off any "critisism" until I see something that needs to be critisised.
Welcome to Pip

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2003-01-27 09:03 AM

Welcome to Passions in Poetry, barbaraj - This is a wonderful place where you'll be able to post and enjoy the works of others while they're reading and enjoying yours... Settle in and make yourself comfy...

Check your email for a special greeting...

AJMGW
Member

since 2002-11-19

Posts 57
Galaxy Roller Rink

8 posted 2003-01-27 12:18 PM

Hey great job! I'm a newbie too.
lets see more And see how we can grow!
Great job!
AJMGW

jewls
New Member

since 2003-02-04

Posts 3
canada

9 posted 2003-02-04 05:15 PM

this was a great read. i can relate to the emotion out forth in this poem. i especially enjoyed the firt three lines. they really hit close to home. keep it up!

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