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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... 
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Little children, little boys, little girls, can't we all just be our own little boy/our own little girl. When did we lose? Why do our tragedies mark the passing of time? When did our evil be more appealing then the good? Can you see? Can you see? Bottles of beer, run and hide little girl. Cover the scars, yes cover the scars for we lost long ago. Little children, little boys, littles girls, can't we all just be our own little boy/our own little girl. [This message has been edited by vlraynes (01-15-2003 08:25 PM).] |
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Android 17
since 2001-07-21
Posts 664Winnipeg |
This is an enigma to me, Ti. I'm VERY curious as to it's muse... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"Bottles of bear, run and hide little girl. Cover the scars, yes cover the scars" Please tell me you didn't hear about last night... *hugs you so tight* You write so true in this one, my friend, you don't know HOW true you write... |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
I really liked this poem. I agree with rhonda, this is quiet true. thanks for posting! ~*Bruises fade father, but the pain remains the same, I still remember how you kept me so afraid, Strength is my mother for all the love she gave*~ |
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Chel2082 Junior Member
since 2002-07-23
Posts 40Baltimore, MD |
This piece was very true. Thanx for sharing. I believe that all of us have a memory of a scene like this and if you don't you are one of the lucky ones. Nice work. ~*chel*~ With GOD all things are possible, true friends stab you in the front...~*CHEL*~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Daniel~ Wise words, my friend...and you've penned them well. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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punkrockerrobin
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
ti dear this made me cry because for some reason it made me think back to earlier times in my life and it brought back memories so tears came pouring down but ti you are very good at what you write keep it up dear. robin you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
wow... really loved this. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Thanks for your time, everyone.  ~Titus "A life unexamined is not worth living." |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
this flowed very well, thank you for sharing. It is so true and well penned. It keeps the reader interested. keep on writing. Andrea |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
So, it's like that? ^^ Quite liked this one. Must be the whole child-like theme. Innocent in a haunting kind of way, but thoroughly enjoyed. ^_^ The only thing that kind of ruined the flow was where you have the "/". Maybe I'm being to literal and maybe I just "overly read" everything, but the"/"...would it work if you maybe took out the slash and just chose one? Or use one for the first one, and the other for the second? Or use "our own little child"? Actually, now that I think of it, it won't work. Meh. Just leave it. I don't know what I'm talking about anymore... ._. But I really liked this one. ^_^ Aww, you're getting to be quite the poet! ^^ WRITE MORE! XD Leah Earth is but the silent echo of the frozen voice of God... |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Very well written ti This makes me sad tho..thinking back to when i was so little and now how corrupt my thinking is lol...im such a mess...i wonder if i could have been someone else if i would only have known what was to be...ohhhh tii!!!!! you put so many questions in my already full head....Standing on the edge of the world |
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