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All girls will relate |
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layla Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 74 |
I went all out did my fingers and my feet I even went on a shopping spree I wanted to be so pretty my hair was so soft I let it down for once put some bronzer on my cheeks looked like I was out in the sun wore some nice clothes a pretty pink lacy shirt finished the outfit with a short black skirt I grew 2 inches with my new black boots decorated my ears with some golden hoops I got all done up put some shimmer on my lips I couldv'e spent all day dreaming of his kiss but when I found out he had let me down my heart dropped to the ground and bounced back into me I couldn't even breathe I thought that he cared I thought I was loved I guess thats what girls get when they think too much Now my hairs pulled back natural colors on my cheeks nails are short from biting and I havent painted them in weeks clothes are back to normal casual and neat I threw the boots in the closet Now theres sneakers on my feet took the hoops out now my ears are bare dont feel pretty and I dont even care |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Personally, I prefer the "casual" look... I don't like girls to get all dressed up jus to try to impress me or whatnot... Natural looking, not covered up by inches of makeup... Anyway, I could feel the hurt in this piece... Well written, I liked it. Thanks for sharing. - Cody - |
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wvplayernotreally Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 215yakima wa |
wow i can totally relate...whenever i get dolled up for a guy i get an utter disapointment...good job i liked it alot...and if guys don't like us for casul looking they don't deserve us " I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking." |
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Missthang Member
since 2001-07-03
Posts 103 |
I love the way this read. It was great how I could picture you getting all dressed up and then stripping yourslef again. Ya know, I'm a girl that prefers the casual look as well. I've never worn make-up a day in my life (aside from lipstick) and I wear comfortable clothes. But I know exactly what it's like to want to impress a guy. But what I've learned is, I guy is going to like you for you. For they very rarley get all dressed up for us. Just food for thought. -AB "Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it. |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
ohh...i liked this one! you're right that most girls can relate...i really enjoyed the ending of it. good stuff :-) -bergundy- "crack my head open, on your kitchen floor. to prove to you, that i have brains." -Alkaline Trio |
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topsyturveychick Member
since 2003-01-19
Posts 57Bris,QLD,Aus |
Hey, wow, nice as poem. I'l have to agree with Cowboy that casual is much better. Being a teen myself I have been through this and I can relate. I think that if someone dosn't like u for who u r when u feel most comfortable, then they really arn't worth it. Just be who u r on the inside and that will show on the outside. Great poem u rock!!!! **Topsy** |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
i really really liked this poem and u no whut is weird i am wearing a pink lacy shirt!! LOL i read this and then looked at myself and im like kewl!!but yea i really enjoyed this poem! CATHY "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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dinky Member
since 2002-10-19
Posts 258 |
hey, this was reallllly good! i luv bronzer but i dont own any it flowed really well ~samantha~ "sometimes i just feel like |
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poohbear19 Member
since 2003-02-02
Posts 94Colorado, USA |
This flowed very well and I can really relate to it. Nicely done. I was once told that you should try and relate it to your audience/reader. Good job and keep writing. Andrea |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Actually, I couldn't relate... lol... Me and my goofiness... when I saw the title, I got the totally wrong idea... LOL  Nice poem, anyway. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
My opinion the casual and natural look are ok, but thats not the point. Its taking the extra step to have a guy look at you and just be like "damn" knowing that his eyes are gonna be all yours. And getting that compliment that will boost your self esteem just a little bit more. This poem reminds of one night when I was with my ex, I got all dolled up to go to a wedding with him and all he was able to say (his exacts words about how I looked) "ok, I guess". Im really glad that you shared this poem with us, I was able to relate to it soo much and I look forward to seeing more of your work. [This message has been edited by Erin (02-04-2003 03:34 AM).] |
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Susie Junior Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 36Illinois |
That flowed so well and the way u presented it was GREAT!!i can relae~we can get so dressed up and look so great and the guy wont even no all we went thru jus 2 make the date great and it jus turns out 2 be the opposite.GRR! |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
You did an amazing job on this piece. You made it flow really nicely and your right, i definately related to it. I hate getting my hopes up because the higher the get the farther they can fall down if i get let down ya know? Ahh...but its all part of life and everything happens for a reason. Im sorry hun Standing on the edge of the world |
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