Teen Poetry #6 |
Wee Bit Longer |
Ephraim Junior Member
since 2002-12-07
Posts 24 |
You don't really need me, and I don't either. Oh wait, yes I do, because I'm all I've got. I don't really need you, baby, you know it's true. We're there for each other, but know it won't last, sad, but it's true. Or is it sad at all? A facade for us to share, a need to feel this pair, come on, let's avoid the truth a wee bit longer. [This message has been edited by Ephraim (01-09-2003 04:00 AM).] |
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jeffwillett Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 86Texas, US |
nice build to the ending...i like it |
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OtherSideOfTheMirror Member
since 2002-12-19
Posts 245 |
Nice. |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Very good poem, great ending! I liked this one lots, well done! WinterWren |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
'ello BOB! yer the first bob i know here...be proud I liked this, cuz i could picture someone saying it to his girlfriend. Nicely done, Bob! Are you scared? BOO! Are you now? |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Short, to the point. I like it, Bob. Sorry I don't have more to say; I'm sick at the moment... ~Titus "A life unexamined is not worth living." |
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