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Teen Poetry #6

You Never Knew

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

0 posted 2003-01-05 02:53 PM

-You Never Knew-

I sit around and think of you,
Of all the things that we may do.

I think of how you make me smile,
How nice it'd be if you'd stay awhile.

When I look into your eyes,
All I see is vast blue skies.

As you pass I smell your hair,
I'm left behind without a care.

Your voice is like a sirens call,
I can not help myself at all.

Nothing compares to my love,
It makes me swear you're from above.

I sit around and think of you,
These are things you never knew.
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I don't really like this rhyme scheme but people keep telling me i need to combine lines to keep the readers interest better so i gave it a shot.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-01-06 06:48 PM

You must like someone's hair you wrote about it one of your other one's I read. Anyway, that was a very good poem also, I liked it alot!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

2 posted 2003-01-06 07:10 PM

lol...i like to use the senses in my poems and for some reason when i think of the sense smell i think of hair...i dunno...to tell the truth, i've never actually smelled hair before...lol

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