Teen Poetry #6 |
Love Hurts |
Denea Furr Junior Member
since 2002-11-03
Posts 31Indiana |
I told him how I felt tonight He meant the world to me I told him how I loved him so How we were meant to be I told him how much I cared for him Our love will never scar He said that he can't be with me Because we live to far He says it hurts him too bad inside The distance hurts us both I told him how it would work out Just give our love some time for growth He didn't want to listen He said this was goodbye He said he didn't want it to have to end this way Yet he left me alone all by myself, I felt like I could die |
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WindSong Member
since 2002-12-23
Posts 313Long Island, New York |
Wow. I've had a similar problem...still do kind of. I hate distance! It ruins good relationships. I love your poem though. I really felt and feel how you feel. Love DOES hurt, but always remember. Everything DOES happen for a reason...Whether that reason is for or for bad, we never know. But anyway. Good write. ~*~Kirah~*~ *Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.* |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
this was really good i thought that u expressed your feelings very well and it rhymed too!!!Nice ###CATHY### "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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jeffwillett Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 86Texas, US |
nice poem, but the uneven line lenghts sorta threw me off...but the feelings really came across |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I am currently in a situation with extreme distance, and I haven't told him how I felt just quite yet...who knows when I will. I have the fear of something like that happening, but love is about taking chances and putting your heart out on the line...if it bends or breaks it will soon mend. --Serena |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Very good poem, from the replies I read alot of people can relate to it. Including me, there's ALOT of distance between me and this guy, but we're still hangin on. Well done! WinterWren |
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