Teen Poetry #6 |
Dream upon a star |
*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Late at night we like to look up in the stars and dream Of things we never saw, of things we never do But what if we did do them? See the things we never saw And do the things we've never done And ending in a dream What we've only just begun? What if looking at the stars at night Is looking back at you Of hopes half remembered And dreams half come true? What if seeing in a dream Is like living in the past And the past becomes your future And the future's all that lasts? What if the dream is reality And the rest of the day a dream? And the stars a gratefull silence When the rest of the days a scream What if dreaming of the stars at night Is the only way to go? The only way to ever see and its the only way you'll ever know It doesn't make much sense but it's not suppose to I wrote it while looking at the stars after a really hard day, tell me what you think. Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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mindy Junior Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 34VA, US |
This is a beautiful poem...very rhetorical. If this is just a nonchalant look at the stars...I would look at the stars forever... |
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jeffwillett Member
since 2003-01-04
Posts 86Texas, US |
I really like this poem, ur right, it doesn't make much since but at the same time it kinda does. I could sit here and find deeper meaning in that poem all day... |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
I gotta say, of everything I've read from you thus far (which, I must admit, isn't very much... I've not been on for a while before last night), this is quite possibly the best yet. I loved this poem, it makes sense, but not if you start reading it and try to fit it into what you thought it was about, rather, only if you let yourself relax and just take the words as they are. If you don't search for meaning that isn't there, you'll be surprised how easy it is to see what is. Now THAT made no sense! LoL. Well, I loved this poem, and it's going to be spending alot of time in my library. *~Rich~* "You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!" |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Hey guys! Thanks for the comments I always enjoy reading what you have to say! And Rich what you said did make sense, this poem only makes sense if you don't think about the meaning. If you start looking for the meaning it isn't there, It's kinda weird that way. Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love) |
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FlyingCloud Member
since 2003-04-28
Posts 151A little place inside my head |
I found this poem to be rather confusing...but also clear at the same time. Always remember to forget |
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peachesNcream Senior Member
since 2001-08-21
Posts 513Ocean Of Tears |
I agree with HopelessRomanticGuy on this one! Exactly..hehe Great write! ~Jess "What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly." |
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blackandwhitehorizon Member
since 2003-05-05
Posts 183an akward state of mind |
yes, i think this does makes sense... i could see how it wouldn't to some one... but, like you said, open your mind and imagination and let your self think about it... it's wonderful... this is one of my favorite poems yet... it has a nice concept and sounds fantastic "Being grown up isn't half as fun as growing up; these are the best days of our lives" |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
In a way it does make sense...it seems to pose the question, "what if everything is turned around into the opposite of what it seems, and that's the way things go?" Anyway, it made me think, Bella! I love poems about stars (and anything in the sky really). Well done! ~Elizabeth Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone... |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
Wow! I haven't seen this one in a while! Someone must have pulled it up out of the archives! Thanks for all the comments. I'm glad to see that this one is getting more, it's one of my favorites even though it's one of my more confusing ones! ~Live and Laugh~ Always strive for excellence never perfection. |
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HopelessRomanticGuy Member
since 2001-08-17
Posts 495LI, New York |
Well, I guess I'll add my two cents in, since my past reply to this was long ago! It's still as good as I remember... I love this poem! always here with you. Now stay and hold my hand and together we'll go somewhere new. ~Rich~ |
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