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0 posted 2003-01-04 03:37 PM


Late at night we like to look up in the stars and dream
Of things we never saw, of things we never do
But what if we did do them?
See the things we never saw
And do the things we've never done
And ending in a dream
What we've only just begun?
What if looking at the stars at night
Is looking back at you
Of hopes half remembered
And dreams half come true?
What if seeing in a dream
Is like living in the past
And the past becomes your future
And the future's all that lasts?
What if the dream is reality
And the rest of the day a dream?
And the stars a gratefull silence
When the rest of the days a scream
What if dreaming of the stars at night
Is the only way to go?
The only way to ever see
and its the only way you'll ever know

It doesn't make much sense but it's not suppose to I wrote it while looking at the stars after a really hard day, tell me what you think.

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

© Copyright 2003 Bella - All Rights Reserved
mindy
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1 posted 2003-01-04 05:16 PM


This is a beautiful poem...very rhetorical. If this is just a nonchalant look at the stars...I would look at the stars forever...
jeffwillett
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2 posted 2003-01-04 10:40 PM


I really like this poem, ur right, it doesn't make much since but at the same time it kinda does.  I could sit here and find deeper meaning in that poem all day...
HopelessRomanticGuy
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3 posted 2003-01-04 10:48 PM


I gotta say, of everything I've read from you thus far (which, I must admit, isn't very much... I've not been on for a while before last night), this is quite possibly the best yet.  I loved this poem, it makes sense, but not if you start reading it and try to fit it into what you thought it was about, rather, only if you let yourself relax and just take the words as they are.  If you don't search for meaning that isn't there, you'll be surprised how easy it is to see what is.  Now THAT made no sense!  LoL.  Well, I loved this poem, and it's going to be spending alot of time in my library.
                                *~Rich~*

"You can't hurt meee!!  'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

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4 posted 2003-01-05 02:40 AM


Hey guys! Thanks for the comments I always enjoy reading what you have to say! And Rich what you said did make sense, this poem only makes sense if you don't think about the meaning. If you start looking for the meaning it isn't there, It's kinda weird that way.

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

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5 posted 2003-05-17 11:31 PM


I found this poem to be rather confusing...but also clear at the same time.

Always remember to forget
The friends that proved untrue.
But never forget to remember
Those who have stuck by you.
-Anon

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6 posted 2003-05-17 11:39 PM


I agree with HopelessRomanticGuy on this one! Exactly..hehe Great write! ~Jess

"What I am is good enough if I would only be it openly."

blackandwhitehorizon
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7 posted 2003-05-18 08:12 PM


yes, i think this does makes sense... i could see how it wouldn't to some one... but, like you said, open your mind and imagination and let your self think about it... it's wonderful... this is one of my favorite poems yet... it has a nice concept and sounds fantastic  

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8 posted 2003-05-19 12:35 PM


In a way it does make sense...it seems to pose the question, "what if everything is turned around into the opposite of what it seems, and that's the way things go?" Anyway, it made me think, Bella! I love poems about stars (and anything in the sky really). Well done!

~Elizabeth

Dreams last for so long, even after you're gone...
~Jewel

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9 posted 2003-05-19 09:51 PM


Wow! I haven't seen this one in a while! Someone must have pulled it up out of the archives! Thanks for all the comments. I'm glad to see that this one is getting more, it's one of my favorites even though it's one of my more confusing ones!
~Live and Laugh~

Always strive for excellence never perfection.
~Bella~

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10 posted 2003-05-19 10:30 PM


Well, I guess I'll add my two cents in, since my past reply to this was long ago!  It's still as good as I remember... I love this poem!

Forever I will stand
always here with you.
Now stay and hold my hand
and together we'll go somewhere new.
~Rich~

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