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OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

0 posted 2002-12-28 09:30 PM

Just because you clean the mirror
You don't change your reflection.
You can wipe away a tear
But that doesn't stop the crying.
You can smile to prevent a frown,
But that doesn't stop its lurking.
If you plan to fix, fix it right
Because everyone know darkness doesn't make it night
And daytime doesn't come from light.
Hiding only postpones the fight.
If you choose to choose then choose to fight
No good ever came from hiding from fright.
Old and bad. Rip it up I don't care. Doesn't even seem like poetry. ::shrugs::

CloudedDreams
Member

since 2002-11-23

Posts 210
My Fantasy Realm

1 posted 2002-12-28 09:35 PM

this is really good! I like it, don't be so hard on yourself

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

2 posted 2002-12-29 06:25 PM

Old and bad?! That was a REALLY good poem, I especially liked the frist few lines! I agree with Clouded, quit downing your work.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

Heavens Tears

Senior Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 677

3 posted 2002-12-29 08:24 PM

"Just because you clean the mirror
You don't change your reflection.
You can wipe away a tear
But that doesn't stop the crying."

My favorite lines. I agree, this was great! Definitely not "old and bad". Nicely done!

[This message has been edited by Heavens Tears (12-29-2002 08:25 PM).]

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

4 posted 2002-12-29 10:21 PM

It's always the same... the better the poet, the worse they think they are... lol. This IS great, old, but NOT bad! I loved it.

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

5 posted 2002-12-29 10:37 PM

Thanks all of you... the thing about this is, it started as a profile thing I wrote randomly like two years ago... but everyone said it was intriguing, so I copied it down. The other night looking at it I thought I might put it here, but I didn't know how to divide it up because it was just a paragraph. I never tried prose so I tried just re-organising it and seeing how it turned out. I don't tend to like the flow of it either. Oh well. Thanks anyways!

[This message has been edited by OtherSideOfTheMirror (12-29-2002 10:39 PM).]

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

6 posted 2003-01-03 06:08 PM

OtherSideOfTheMirror~
Well, 'everyone' was right...it IS intriguing,
and very good too. I REALLY like this a lot.
Nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (01-03-2003 06:09 PM).]

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